"Walls & Mirrors"

 

 

Tell me what you see
oh looking glass man,
do you see beauty?                                   

Do you see soft lips
and ample hips, or
smooth skin to wrap
your hands in?

Do you see eyes like
the moor, dark and
even a shade alluring?
 
Tell me what you see
oh looking glass man,
do you see poetry?

Words that which my lips
produce, like a solid breath,

or a lettered touch, flowing

like silk into your ears?
 

 

Tell me what you see

oh looking glass man,

do you see a strand of hope?

 

A small stitch of a place you

could call your own,

a place for you within me?

 

Oh looking glass man,

I'll tell you what I see.

 

I see a time that came and went,

of endless sunny "hopefuls" and

nights with feathered dreams, of

drapes of emotions washing the

halls and walls of the space I

haunted.

 

I see an old smile creeping at the

corner of my lips, weary and weak

from lack of use.

 

And it tells you, quite simply to...

 

close-your-eyes,

 

for-all-it's-worth.

Reviews

[Baby Boy]

I see beauty gurl in you and your words! :) I can really feel this write sweetie and from top to bottom it spells pure poetry! Great job Miss Linda! I'm looking through the glass and I see an Angel! :) One luv gurl!


-JC-

[Crazy Cat Man]

great piece i love this...:D

[Imperfection]

I like the repitition of 'oh looking glass man'

This poem flows like a river.

Absolutely stunning.

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

very enjoyable read... nicely done

[autumnsky]

I really like this piece, everything about it. I can relate to it so well. I like the twist.

[Twisted Words (Tom)]

Ok, an impressive write. A unique mix of attitude and emotion, with interesting visuals and a flow that... I love the way it picks up pace and energy in my favorite stanza where you begin telling what you see. -Tom

[TL Boehm]

thanks to Dawn for sending this to me - this is a poem to fall into...wonderfully written - with that soulful melancholy - we are our own worst critics - as the voice of the poet believes the worst in this piece -
I loved the repetitive lines in this and the flow of the entire poem. Beautifully done.

[Brette Medb]

I loved the repetition of the phrase oh looking glass man, it moved the poem at the perfect pace. Great write.


Brette