Chapter.. 1

  At the very old dark ages, In A Magnificent Castle

In the Biggest Hall-.... A large man in his Black Cloak Standing laughing in front of a another hopeless boy

“You die today, Kiro”

The boy with desperate look on his face “kill me? Hahahahaha. Please, Take a no.”

“Don’t worry, I’ll make your wish comes true tonight”

The Blond messy short hair-boy with angry look up on his face: His right hand turned into Large big claw with Black fire out of it

“your head, I’m taking it now, Marcos”

“Wha.. you still angry because of that?” laughed the demon In pleasure

“You Killed the Boy’s Mother?”

“What big deal!”

“She was your damn DAUGHTER”

“She Betrayed her own kind, Going to A Werewolf & even Giving birth to that Halfling”

“How could you do that you Damn-blood-Sucking Monster?”

“Shut up, I’m the King of the Vampires The first Pure blood. How dare you talk to me like that?”  The man got angry & turned into a big monster with large claws & weird thin fangs, red eyes sending chill to the guards at the door At the same time outside the door Vampires were fighting against a grey fury monster

  Kiro heard the fighting outside & turned to see Marcos walked in circles round him “It seems like the Halfling had come to die like his father”

“He has a name, Its Riley & his Father was the bravest man I ever met &  His mother was most caring woman, I saw.. Not like you, She never hurt a sole creature. She cared for other, even Monsters like you she would give them a second chance”

“That’s why she died like a weak. She deserved to die like her Husband & the boy outside I’ll kill him by my hands But you.... won’t be here to witness it” Marcos smirked, Kiro recognized something was wrong, He looked down to see a circle of black dust round him, he tried to get out but It was like a magical prison The little grey-head boy entered to see Kiro shouting “Riley, Take the sword & Get out of here...  now” Marcos spelled some spells. An enormous pole of light fell from sky & hit the circle & when it faded, Kiro was no where to be found, He vanished with no traces leaving The big monster laughing madly in pleasure

 

 

   620 years later... nearly the present time, In One big city Near the sea

 

 At the night, a blond tall -tanned- Man walked away from his woman. The -blond young woman, wearing glasses, tying her hair with a cute pink band- wiping the tears from her beautiful turquoise eyes. The woman returned to her fancy apartment in a wealthy Skyscraper. She took a shower & went to the living room to watch TV... then Suddenly  An Enormous Earthquake Happened. Lights went out, Power off, the Chandelier fell & crashed on the table in front of her. The girl screamed & went out to her balcony to see The Sea is shaking, High waves like those of Tsunami came up but weakened on their way to the shore.

The woman thought “ Its getting late, I should sleep now to get ready for school” she returned back to her room

 

 At the same time by the shore, A boy came out from the water limping outta the shore then fainted by the road- He was wearing an outrageous weird torn outfit, long blond hair white skin & green eyes

Reviews

[ColdMan]

There is nothing wrong with starting a work In Media Res, (Yeah I know this is happening some time before the main story judging by the time skip but you get my drift hopefully) but while i know what's going on based off your writing I need a bit more description to chew on. Show my the details of this castle, show me the details of these people. I wanna see it but its very much up to interpretation at the moment.

[Stephanie M]

Interesting characters. I've got to see what happens next.

[A.Tarek]

Before you continue, The editing isn't good. I admit it...😔
But the story plot is interesting
Hope you like it

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good use of description. You shared some history and brought to life some characters. I liked the pace of the story. Thank you for sharing the amazing opening chapter.
Coyote

[Desiree O'Neal]

Woww this is really interesting, it kept my attention, and that's hard to do haha, the characters seem to be coming along nicely in this chapter.