Chapter 1 - The mysterious Bar Keeper

Don't you think there is something odd about this city?

·        It was September, 12th 1962, The winter was starting to knock on the door of London, and black clouds in the sky haunt the people’s faces, a storm was about o begin, and when it rains in this time of the year.... many people use to be mentioned as dead. The Myth says that, the rain eats up the peoples flesh and bones and leaves only their clothes... I wonder how dumb people can be sometimes, but well... If they say its true then let me investigate.

·        I walked by the bar, people were sitting quietly, waiting for the rain to stop; they looked at me with a curious look but then....

 

·        "What in a world  you think you are doing here, sir? I can't let anyone who got hit by the rain in my, bar! Do you understand, sir?”

 

·        Confused, I looked at him in the face; I raised my eye brow, and asked him with a silly look "

 

·        "Do you have mental issues, sir? If you don't mind I want to sit down in this..."

 

·        The man violently, pulls off the chair, and I fall in the floor with my butt... 

 

·        "What a pain you ended up to be you know? I am sorry to tell you this but, I am an inspector, and as a civil in this city I deserve the right to be served a drink and..."

 

·        Once more... I get interrupted... darn it, but is there any normal person in this city? The man just hit me in the face because I tried to be civilized... and looked at me with a scared face and shouted      

 

·        "GET OFF MY BAR YOU DEMON! ONLY DEMONS CAN SURVIVE THE RAIN!"  

 

·        Oh God! Well if they say that I am a demon then what can I say... I walk away from him slowly and get to the exit door, I look at him and say

 

·        "Don't worry pal, I will find all those missing people, and I will solve this case"

 

·        I shut the door and I walk slowly to the back of the bar, as I walk I wonder - "why was that man so fearful of me? Why did he hold back when I said that I was an inspector then he punched me in the face and shouted at me telling me to leave the bar? hmmmm there is something odd about this man, he looked nervous when I closed the doors..." - I reached the back of the bar and there was two doors that gets you underground. I wonder... what is beyond those doors? I think it's more than time for me to search for evidences.  I open the doors slowly and then...

Author's Note

I made some changes in the Chapter please tell me if you like it better this way :) , I hope you guys review so I can make it better :)

Reviews

[Blake]

It's a lot easier to read now. Very good :p

[Some Random Person.]

It's good so far, but there were some grammar mistakes. Also, every time a person speaks, it should be another paragraph. Chapters are best off longer, don't you think? Otherwise, very good.

[~Lizzy♬]

I really loved the chapter. It's making me want to know what's next to come up. :)

~Lizzard~

[Blake]

Keep writing. I am curious of what will happen next.
Great job with this though. :D