Darkness

This is a poem I wrote while dealing with a really hard break up.

You look at the darkness scared and anxious,

you don't know what to except.

You're just suppose to jump,

jump and hope for the best to come.

The words aren't enough,

you see yourself running out of breath.

It's hopeless because you can't see,

you have to learn to adapt to survive.

I's not something you're taught in school,

it's not something that hits you softly.

Instead it's like a train rapidly approaching you,

it warns, it shows its existence, and we ignore it,

only to find ourselves crushed without hope to feel.

Oh why we wonder,

only to hear that same buzzing sound,

it rings in your ear, but not quite what you want to hear.

and you see yourself in tears.

Oh why we contemplate,

only to see life ripping you apart,

not what we want to see, but still we let it carry on,

and you see yourself lost in fears.

So then when the storm is over, 

and the skies clear, we see some light, 

hope seems to be with us, but you can't move,

deep down you're so damaged that you can't feel,

you can't see, you can't hear.

Then again the buzz, rings in our ears,

not quite what we want to hear, 

to only find that it's not that clear.

You hope that someone will patch you up,

put you back on the road, 

but really you still can't hear, you can't feel, you can't see,

your only feeling is fear.

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I like the way you describe how you feel after a really bad break up.
This poem was deep and emotional has real meaning, I think it was moving and i really enjoyed the read.
I just think the only thing missing was a rhyme scheme kinda makes it sound more poetic and finishes each good poem off, but that is my opinion.
Don't get me wrong though I love this poem, and rhyming poetry isn't for everyone.
Great write :)

[ATaekwondo]

hey guys! Tell me what you thought of the poem. I really want to know what people feel or think of it.