THE SOULFUL KISS

this is my first work.

I don't know what does i want 

when i am walking through the

lone valleys of my life

 

I don't know what does i need

from the place where the-

dream flowers blush unseen

But i know one thing ,my heart is-

thirst for that soulful kiss from the one

that i am always looking for...

Author's Note

i will expect all of yours opinion about my first work.

Reviews

[farstars]

hm, i really like the concept of this poem but you've compacted it very closely into only a few lines. this could be drawn out a lot. something you need to be careful of is your grammar. i understand that you might not be very familiar with english but if you forget a word or add something in that really doesn't make sense, it just leaves your audience baffled. i can really see that you have a great eye for imagery. try to make your images longer, though. give your audience something to hang onto.

[piggy]

lovely, keep up the good work.

[YES]

same as you