I REALLY HOPE IT MAKES YOU CRY

Written on a rainy night from the archives of my mind... Is she real ?? or maybe just a memorex in my mind...only two will know if she is real or not enjoy "I hope it makes you cry"

 

I REALLY HOPE IT MAKES YOU CRY

I read the words that you wrote.

They are now imbedded in my mind.

Seems if things stayed the same

To both it would be unkind.

 

Thought there was something

That maybe we could do.

If I said there was

That would maybe be untrue.

 

We wanted in our hearts

A life with two to share.

You have changed your mind,

For I feel it in the air.

 

We met for the first time.

That was some time ago.

Then I had to leave.

Did not want to go.

 

We talked about me coming back.

That this would be our home.

Said that you love me.

No longer wanted to be alone.

 

How I really missed you

So I hurried to return.

Think it was to soon.

A lesson too well learned.

 

We had some problems,

potholes along the way.

Hurtful things were said.

I knew I couldn't stay.

 

Deep inside I knew

The feelings that I had.

Tried to make believe

It did not make me sad.

You took me to the limo.

It was a rainy night.

Waited for the driver.

Had to catch an early flight.

We sat there together

In the warmth of your car.

Each one trying, think,

"Will this leave an ugly scar?"

Then a black SUV

Pulled in the parking lot.

Inside I was hoping

That it wouldn't stop.

Now this was the part,

It caused me so much pain.

My tears were falling

Just like the morning rain.

Was a little late to say

Just how much I cared.

Wish I had said it then

But my senses were impaired.

You were so hurt

For no last hug did I give.

Something wish I had done

That I know you can't forgive.

We pulled out on the highway

You followed close behind.

Watched as we turned away,

My destination was defined.

I watched as your tail lights

Faded in the mist.

I know you didn't see me

As I threw you one last kiss.

That was two months ago

We have talked so many times.

Talked about togetherness

About the hills we need climb.

Said that I loved you

And wanted you as my wife.

Think that really scared you

For we live a different life.

I know that you love me.

You know I love you too.

We have so many ups and downs.

Our life always seems askew.

Seems like the slightest thing

Can just tears us apart.

I know I've done a few things

That were not so very smart.

You words that were written

Were said in a gentle goodby.

You were like a mother bird .

Sending her baby off to fly.

It is hard for me tell you,

The way it made me feel.

Like a sailboat in a storm

That had just lost its keel.

You say that you love me.

But now only as a friend.

Seems that you have wrote the story.

Such a sadness you have penned.

The good mornings that we shared

Will not be heard anymore.

I know that I will miss them,

In my heart I'll keep them stored.

“The good night sweeti”,

We always sealed with a kiss.

From you I’ll never hear again

Something I know will be amiss.

I know now it was time

For us to saygood bye.

But eveytime you read this

I really hope it makes you cry.

 

tk

Reviews

[Darl]

wow this is another amazing piece, " I really hope it make you cry", I have wished that so much over the last 2 months. It perhaps is one of the worst feelings when a partner doesnt understand your pain. very moving poem.

[Dreamer]

oh yes, we tend to hope that when the ppl we love/loved realize the pain that that they have caused us, it would make them hurt as well (not because we want to spite them, but because we want them to understand) Your use of "threw a kiss" instead of "blew a kiss" is interesting. It leaves the after taste of desperation. A need to get that last gesture to the person before they go away. This is a great write:)

[Rene Velez]

very well penned poem of emotions and loss, you do it well my friend...

[Kenneth The Poet]

Stunning, just stunning.

[KAREN]

So sad, but love isn't easy! The ending was great! Great flow and ryhme!

[brenda]

sad really sad but beautful in its way nice poem !:)

[Raven Starhawk]

It tugs sincerely at my heart strings. I think that you have a lovely way with words but just because you compose them so well. They feel as though you lived them or have known someone who have felt them.

[Kat Collins]

So sadly beautiful and moving....it is heart-wrenching to let go when we love someone so much. The unpredictability of the human nature, the fickle heart, love...we can never guarantee they'll stay. This echoes sentiments of my long-ago broken marriage. It never survived the fall. Love is work...hard work...and many choose to give up instead of persevere. Falling in and out of love is only a fallacy...a whim of the heart. To sustain true love, one must be willing to give all they have.