THE MAIDEN AND THE DRAGON

This is piece of plebeian prose I wrote 2 + yrs ago think 3rd thing I tried to write and it shows lol

 

THE DRAGON AND THE MAIDEN

 

Alas my fair maiden

You hide behind your veil.

Please listen closely

To this Jousters tale.

 

For this Knight he jousts

Sans armor he no more.

As a fool he was

So many times before.

 

Twice upon his steed

He mounted for the joust.

Never had his armor on

So was sure to lose the bout.

 

Twice knocked off his steed,

His pride though really hurt.

Still he held his shoulders back

Though face be still with dirt.

 

The King he waves the flag.

The final joust be near.

Yea Knight now dons his armor

But not for the hand of Gwenivier.

 

For yea Knight a costly lesson

Learned from years of tears and pain.

To capture hand yarn maiden

A dragon must be slain.

 

There is a fire breathing dragon

That lies deep within your soul.

Knight never getting close enough

To do battle with its evil hold.

 

Now this Knight he jousts

For maidens hand no more.

For the love of thy maiden,

Now no longer holds its lore.

 

Other hands do beckon now.

My lesson so well learned.

If I try again to slay your dragon

I know I will surely burn.

Author's Note

be kind to me on this one ok !!!! it's not one of my better ones but hey it makes the other's not so good look grrrreat lol.

Reviews

[aShadowsKiss]

Thats good!

[StarSandwich]

Awh. He tried as he got back up after he had fallen down. He wants her he needs her. The Knight getting up once knocked down he needs her wants her. She stands. Times running out but in his heart hes torn. But in her heart is a dragon its guarding it. He wants to be in her heart so there for he must slay the dragon? I hope I've got the correct understanding.

[Kat Collins]

I love the renaissance feel of this one. Winning the heart of a maiden...or at least trying, only to lose and be scorned. Very interesting piece...I could picture the knight fighting to his last breath. There aren't many left who would do such a thing for a fair lass....

[Raven Starhawk]

The title of this is intriguing. The body of the poem is definitely a well penned treat for this reader. I thought it was better than okay and I doubt anyone is going to down play its quality. ^^*

[light and ashes]

I think this is wonderful :] I really enjoyed reading it.

[Donna Lorenz]

How could we not be kind to a dragons awfully feared Knight. Good show!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Solid, solid piece of work. I think you were a bard or a minstrel in a former life.

[Tori]

That was really good. I'm glad someone finally emphasized how fighting for the same person evetually isn't worth it. Want that a*s? Go get it, but when there's a dragon involved……There's other maidens out there. Great job ^.^ I enjoyed the rhyme scheme.

[brenda]

lol i think this was good !:) i felt like i was in the medieval times :) love it !:)