ONCE I LOOKED AT RAINBOWS

One too many rainbows looking for that pot gold....

 

Once I looked at rainbows

Saw colors in different hues.

Now I see in black and white

For my eyes are misting blue.

Always have been a dreamer,

Looking for a pot of gold.

Thought it would bring be happiness,

But a different ending did unfold.

Took her on my unicorn,

Heading to the land of bliss.

Where fairies spread pixie dust,

So the way we would not miss.

We road upon rainbow,

Her,my unicorn and me.

Even stopped upon a cloud,

To see what we could see.

Saw another rainbow

Across the meadow far.

We even made a wish,

Upon a morning star.

We laughed as we spoke

About this fairy tale.

Both just being dreamers

With egos rather frail.

We did ride upon that rainbow.

She was right there by my side

And yes I had unicorn.

To this I shall confide.

That was some time ago,

Or maybe only yesterday.

For my constant dreaming

Has scared my love away.

No longer are there rainbows.

Nor Unicorns named Dream .

Fairy tales or pixie dust

Not as real as they did seem.

So if you go chasing rainbows,

Looking for that pot gold.

First look whats along side of you

For your loss could be untold.

 

tk

Reviews

[Christina May Shanaberg]

I liked this poem quite well; love is like a fantasy world, but losing it is a nightmare.

Now I see in black AND white
Looking for a pot OF gold.
Thought it would bring ME happiness,
We road upon A rainbow,
She was right there BESIDE (OR by my side)
And yes I had A unicorn.
Looking for that pot OF gold.
First look what's along side you
For your LOSS could be untold.

Not criticizing, just helping you find the typos, when you edit. We all get excited adding something new and make lots of mistakes. Thank goodness for "Edit!"

[Kenneth The Poet]

Nice work. You are a master of rhyme.

[StarSandwich]

Mystical, fantasy cute, Its a different but adorable write.

[Raven Starhawk]

All in all it makes for a read that clearly measures your talent in exquisite volumes.

[Rene Velez]

powerful, mystical, and with a sprinkle of wisdom, well done.

[Ruth]

A beautiful message1 We all too often forget what is right in front of us in search for dreams! You have just reminded me of that here, in a strong manner! Beautiful work! xx