HE WAS BY MY SIDE

MY TRIP UP ON A MOUNTAIN 1ST OF THREE TRIPS UP THE MOUNTAIN MORE SPIRITUAL THAN RELIGOUS

HE WAS BY MY SIDE


Climbed up on the mountain.
Fingers almost touched the sky.
Even had to duck my head
As a cloud came tumbling by.

Felt I was invisible,
Amongst the blue and gray.
God must have rested here

On that seventh day.

I could see for miles.
As the air was clear and bright.
Sun shining through the trees,

Though did cast an eerie light

The leaves seem to sing
A song upon the breeze.
Some floating to the ground,
Saying "can catch me if you please".

Even saw an eagle,
Soaring oh so very high.
Looked at me suspiciously,
Giving me that eagle eye.

Then a little chipmunk
Came by to say hello.
Cheeks stuffed with acorns.
I think he’s wanting me to go.

Cannot remember when,
I spent a day like this.
You not being with me
Is the only thing amiss.

I feel so much better now,
For I’ve almost touched the sky.
Still don’t understand it,
Nor the reason why.

But I will take this day,
Always hold it deep inside.
As I have  saw all its beauty
For HE was by my side.

 

A TARNISHED KNIGHT

Author's Note

changed a few stanzas took out some words to make if flow better ...hope you enjoy

Reviews

[Vestigial Appendage]

This is wonderful, spiritual piece.

[Donna Lorenz]

The peace and beauty of the mountains is calling me. Thank you for the visual painting,

[Raven Starhawk]

Your writing, Sir, has become a fascination of mine.

[Rene Velez]

visually striking, nature plays a big role in this write, a pleasant read...

[Fire Tulip]

Your type of writing is not writing...writing can be good, bad, selfish, etc. Yours is painting words onto the page. Painting is filled with many colors and catches every little detail. Just like you did.

[Icuronetoo]

I'm breathing in the fresh clean air,
feeling the breeze rush through my hair.
You captured much with your rhyme
so now I can climb that mountain any time.

Thank you

[♥ EmeraldHeart &..]

I really enjoyed reading your piece. It's wonderful how you interpenetrated God in this. Thank You (:

[Princess LouLou]

There is wonderful of imagery is lovely and added the effect of a god makes the poem so mysterical! I really like this poem. :)

[patricia]

Loved all of this...nothing I like more than to get up on the tops, and days when I can't...poems like yours give me beautiful imagination vacations. Thankyou.