Falling For The Pauper

plot:

18 year old, Adelaide Matthews gets what she wants, when she wants. Her parents are multi-billionaire owners of a world famous record company so things seem to just fall right into her lap. Since the age of 5, all she ever wanted to be was famous and envied by other girls, for having the ideal teenage life. Never, in a million years did she think she would end up falling for Jacob Ohman, a poor man, who is about to be kicked out of his apartment because he can’t afford the rent. Is she falling for the pauper?

 

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I stood in front of the full-length mirror and looked at my reflection.

My honey brown hair was in tangled curls hanging down. I wore a short, purple cocktail dress with a sparkly bodice and plain dark purple sash, with a flower, joined to the flared skirt piece. I wore single strapped black stilettos with a 4 inch heel on them.

I did a little twirl in front of the mirror and sighed. Tonight was going to be perfect.

 

It was my 18^th birthday party and I had it all sorted out. It was going to be like those ‘sweet 16’ parties you see on MTV, but better!  I had a bunch of live bands playing like ‘Hey Monday’, ‘The Maine’ and ‘The Academy Is’. I had a giant cake made and I was going to arrive by helicopter.

I walked over to my bedroom window and looked out. Mum and dad had the workers setting up all morning. The stage was almost together, there were lights set up around the pool, there were tables and chairs set up, and balloons everywhere.

“Oh sweetie, you look fabulous!” mum cried leaning against the door frame. I jumped a little as I didn’t know she was there.

I smiled at her. “Thanks mum”.

“Like I always say, there’s no need to thank me, I’m only telling the truth”

There was a moment of silence between us. It wasn’t one of those awkward moments, but one of those happy moments.

“Your father and I have a surprise for you tonight, darling.”

I grinned at her. I love surprises and if it was anything like the past years, this was going to be awesome.

When I was five, my parents gave me a horse for my birthday. That didn’t come cheap either! They had to get stables and everything.

When I turned 11 my parents put me on a plane to America and got me on the Ellen DeGeneres show. they also got Beyonce to sing happy birthday to me.

On my 15^th birthday they gave me front row tickets to go see Katy Perry and then back stage passes for 10 friends.

When I turned 16 I got a sweet 16^th surprise party and a Holden commodore ssv8.

And last year they got me front row tickets to see Oprah when she toured down under. 

 

Mum curled her strait dark brown hair around her finger.

“What are you thinking about?” she asked, smiling slightly.  

“I’m thinking that you and dad are amazing parents to me.” I grinned at her.

Mum walked over to me. “Well we do our best to make our little girl happy” she pinched my cheeks lightly and pulled me into a bear hug.

 

“Oh… my… god!!! Adelaide! This is going to be an amazing party!” my two best friends, Tara and Megan both screamed together as they ran into my room. The paused as the saw me and mum hugging.

Mum pulled away and glanced at me “ill leave you girls to it then” Smiling, she turned and walked away, shutting the door behind her.

“I’m sorry Adel, we didn’t realise you were having a mother daughter moment” Megs said apologetically.

“Its fine” I laughed. “Me and mum do that all the time, we are very close”

Megs is a very emotional person. She cared about the littlest things sometimes. She has natural red hair cut and shaped around her neck. She wore a redish-pink dress with sequins around the waist line. The front of the dress came to about mid thy, and the back was cut into longer layers so when she walked it all flowed out behind her.

Tara on the other had had her own opinion. She was all about fashion and keeping up with the in-crowd. She wore a baby blue Louis Vuitton dress. It has a flowery pattern on the bodice, then a ribbon wrapped around the waist. The skirt part flowed down from the hips to just above the knees. Her golden hair was styled in a messy, but elegant bun.

 

I looked at my clock hanging on my wall. It was about 2 hours before the party. The girls and I all walked down the stairs just as the door bell rang.

I opened the door and a camera crew was there. The cameras, trucks, and the rest of the gear all had the ‘MTV’ logo printed on them.

“OH MY GOD!!! OH MY GOD!!!” I screamed jumping up and down.

“Surprise!” mum and dad both shouted.

“You did not!” I shouted back to them, surprised.

“Yes we did” then answered back.

I ran over and hugged them.

My party was going to be viewed on MTV by millions of teenagers who will wish they were me!

“You can go set up at the back.” Dad told the camera crew.

“You, Megs and Tara can all give the crew a tour of the preparations.” Dad smiled at me as I released him from my hug.

I grinned. This was going to be a party to die for………………………………..

 

Reviews

[Matthew vonHone]

It was a good start, but you left me wanting to know more about the party. You have a natural way with dialog, and that's good, there are some punctuation issues, but then you knew that. When writing, the structure and feel is all from the author. There are things to work on here, but it really is a good first effort on the site ... keep it up and before long you'll be just as good as anyone. Keep writing.

[snopadelic]

I liked it. I liked the characters and there is a mix of dailog which is natural which is pretty hard to write. This is a first good write. The grammr is pretty good apart from Numbers look better when they spelt rather than written numerically if you get my drift. Too many exclamation marks for my liking. Apart from that your grammer is fine and your sentence sructure is kewl. Good job

[Carrie Manor]

Oh! I really like your story line, I hope to read more pretty soon. You have it very well written, and can be followed easily. (:

[BeccaB]

wow am loving this story line ^_^ its so interestig and the way you have writen it is captevating well done i hope to read more soon ^_^