Only a Whisper

another short

buried in the depths of my soul

farther than the flesh and bone

I can feel you whispering there

it is here that I am home.

but living on a reverie

is sometimes cold and empty

I long to feel your touch

your indescribable energy.

Reviews

[Kyle]

Very nice! I like how this started and ended. Very romantic in a way. :0)

[Seshat Nidaba]

I could be wrapped in your poetic voice here, well done.

What I mean to say, is it's immersive.

[Everett DeValle]

The beauty of your poem is immensely profound in its short stanza...the longing coos and oozes from this poem. Excellent.

[Moflo]

I like the length of this piece, I think it helps the reader to focus on how profound the wording is. "But living on a reverie/Is sometimes cold and empty," that line really caught my attention. Very well written, good work!

[Muse]

Oooh this is good. I can feel the energy in this short, sweet, and thought-provoking poem. Well penned.

[Crow]

Beautifully simple, I luv your expression of feeling.

[Penlady]

makes one FEEL...beautiful...

[Antonio Valentino]

awww this is soooo beautiful...

I wish i could concentrate such passion in my poems..

i know this feeling so very well, thank you for putting it into such wonderful words..
Antonio :)