The Mirror

A girl,

broken

by the world

every breath

was... cold

telltale shiver

or was it... a tremble?

she kissed the wind

as it caressed her freckles
whirling her into fate
was there something unspoken?
hidden, waiting...

for a kindred spirit or even,

perhaps an undiscovered soul mate?

she glanced my way a moment
revealing something even the mirror couldn't disguise 

burning embers in the depths of her wide-open eyes
beyond the real pain and cloak of smiles that she chooses to let them see
and then I realized... that also included me,
if one would but look close enough
any would feel
the strength of her soul
a thousands pacing lions
and hear their mighty echoing roar. 

Reviews

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I love the honesty of this poem,stunning words expressed in this beautiful piece. I admired the style structure. Keep writing and thanks for sharing.

[Aramey]

Thank you very much for the comment. Writing to me, is like breathing... I don't think I'll ever stop :)

[Steve]

I really like this. It is inspirational and a bit emotional. But maybe the title could be a little different? Just a thought.

[Aramey]

That's a great idea. Usually I do no revisions to my work... I let it flow and come out raw. The titles and endings however are difficult that way. But thanks for your suggestion, you are right- it is definitely off :)

[Steve]

You are welcome! I am enjoying your writes.

[Aramey]

Likewise :)

[Bowers]

wow, I really love this, i feel it, it was emotional, it was deep... a lovely poem. great job!

[Aramey]

I'm glad you enjoyed and thank you for the comment :)

[Bowers]

no problem :)

[B-poet]

Very passionate and emphatic in detail regarding a surging emotional need towards a loving acceptance within a cold world. Great write. :)

[Aramey]

You nailed it right on the head, thanks for reviewing :)

[Alexander Rodgers]

Really great work, I love the feel it gives and the casual rhymes. Also, you seem to have your own unique style, and I appreciate that :)

[Aramey]

Thank you, to find a unique style is exactly what I'm trying to do. It's definitely encouraging to hear that I'm on the right track :)

[Alexander Rodgers]

Anytime :D

[The 13th Eros]

What a beautiful, fierce glimpse into the reflections of you.. the fire.. the passion.. the life released in such a wildness. May it ever be, dear Aramey.. xx

[Aramey]

Thank you. I always enjoy your reviews. They're always a pleasure to read as is your descriptive poetry.

[The 13th Eros]

You're a wondrous light, dear one. xx