Lovetown

One of my first REAL poems...written when I was thirteen...what do ya think?

In all the years

with nurture and serenity, it is crowned

    until the ocean pulls up to Juliet's feet again

this town has burned to the ground...

 

Though crazy, sad messes it has aided

but this news is murder and me makes no sound

     until birds s**t good luck on the devil's hideous kingdom

this town has burned to the ground.

          

-Anarda Nashai

author of School Girl

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Reviews

[mysticgmekeepr]

I think you were a precocious child. I was writing at that age too. It saved my sanity for a long time.
They say we come to this life equipped with everything we need for our particular journey. Well I know for sure I couldn't have made it on mine, without the gift of words, and a little ability to craft them into a poem.
Even in our most cryptic efforts we are telling our story and offering the world pieces of us.

[Alice Beecher]

"until birds s**t good luck on the devil's hideous kingdom"
this line is incredibly evocative
I wonder what your inspiration was?

[Catastrophe]

wow, i like..for a first poem its memorable, great work!

[Christopher Marlowe]

Quite mature ideas for a 13-year old! What an impressive starting place! Well done...

CM

[Laura E. Aranda]

13, huh? Impressive. BTW, thanks for reviewing some of my work. I appreciate it and can't wait to be connected as your friend. Cheers, lea