Prologue

Prologue

Don’t stop running. Don’t ever stop running. You’re life may depend on it…just like mine did. My heart pounded as my quick feet carried me deeper and deeper into the forest. I kept moving forward, not daring to look back. Getting caught was the last thing I needed. I clawed my way up a thick tree, desperately hoping that I could hide myself within its sturdy branches. A wolf howled at the silvery moon, and I realized that it was far past midnight. I heard a scuffling of feet, and I looked down, only to see my pursuers. In their hands, were the things I feared the most. Guns.

            “Where did she go?” one of the men whispered quietly, though I could have heard him a mile away.

            “I don’t know, but this girl likes to surprise us, so be on the lookout.”

Despite my fear, I smiled at this.

            “The trees. Look in the trees,” another man barked.

I hesitated. Should I stay? Should I run? There was no way to tell. I flexed my claws and prepared to fight, just in case this got ugly. I scanned my surroundings, making sure that they hadn’t started climbing yet. I could have outran these men just as easy as I could have killed them, but my eyes kept drifting back to the guns. One move, and I would fall to the ground dead. I couldn’t take that chance…not yet anyways.

Suddenly, one of the men starting advancing towards the tree I was in. I started climbing higher. My hands and feet moved swiftly, yet quietly. To them, I was just a dark shadow. They couldn’t see me unless they had night vision goggles. I glanced downward and saw the man was now about halfway up the tree.

            “There’s nothing up here, General,” he called.

I sighed thankfully. Just as I was about to move, my hand slipped, and I plunged head first towards the ground. I twisted my body in mid air, landing perfectly on my two feet. Instantly, the men were upon me, shouting and screaming like they had just struck gold.

            “We got her, we got her!” they whooped.

I clawed half of their faces off, trying to escape their grasp, but there were too many of them. I hissed wildly, my mind racing. Finally, the General approached me, and as the men pinned me down, he took out a knife. I gasped, fearing what was about to come. He glanced at the weapon for a few seconds, then grinned evilly.

            “Well kitty, kitty. We’ve finally got you,” he snapped.

I kicked around furiously, hoping that someone would just happen to let go. The General came nearer. So near, that I could smell his onion-like breath.

            “Give up. Give up, and we’ll set you free,” he compromised.

I unleashed my fangs, and lunged at his throat. He leaped back about two feet.

            “Never,” I snarled.

He smiled.

            “Very well. Men, turn her onto her back.”

They flipped me over so hard, that the wind was knocked out of me. I recovered quickly though. I heard the General coming closer and closer.

            “This is you’re last chance.”

I didn’t say anything. Unexpectedly, I felt something like fire slice through my back. I screeched in pain, squirming like a fish on land. Then another, and another…

            “Make it stop!” I screamed.

The men released me, and I heard them wander off. The General stayed behind.

            “Thanks pussycat. This is just what we needed,” and with that, he stalked off.

I could feel blood pour out from my back. I curled into a tight ball and endured the agonizing pain. The last thing I remembered before I closed my eyes, was darkness surrounding me…

Reviews

[Lucia]

Very good! It makes me want to read more and more of it! Very mysterious and suspenseful! Glad I am reading it!

Just one thing: How is the General cutting into your back if he flipped you on your back? That is the one thing that I notice right off the bat.

I didn't see any grammatical errors or typos.

Maybe review some of my writing?

[D.R. Wilsey Jr.]

I agree with the review below. The dialogue needs a bit of work, but overall a good start. And, make sure you fix the one part. If you're flipped onto your back, how is the General cutting into your back?

[The Perfectionist]

Me-ow! Now that's what I like to see. This is fast-paced, engaging, and gets us into the head of the character right away. I'm definitely reading the first chapter.

I have two complaints. One, your dialogue needs work. The words themselves are fine, but the structure you surround them with needs a tune-up. This is especially prominent with the last line. The other issue I have is a minor one; simply, how did you feel something slice through your back if you were lying on your back?

Onto chapter one!

[Global Norskie]

Great writing! Enticing prologue - makes me want to read more :)