Intrusively Yours

This too is love....

I long to rip out your heart
as it throbs and beats
touch its pulsing meat

I want to peel your skin
Wrap myself in it
Feel your heat from within

I'd love to blade your veins
bleed each lumen out
fill it up with my pain

I wish to be your moan
echo in your vesicles
the hollows of your bones

I need to slice your womb
choke it with my seed
seal it shut like a tomb

I yearn to suck your brain
savor all your thoughts
make you go insane

I look to pierce your eyes
blind you with my love
be your only true sunrise

I aim to be your demise
to be the last one you see
So you sleep forever in me

Author's Note

Randomly rhymed....

Please enjoy ....☺

Reviews

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Loving the vicious tone throughout this one, AJ......it's the kind of brilliant realism I could certainly inflict on some certain hapless a******s. Ohhh, to rip their pitiful faces off with my bare hands! Wouldn't that be "quiet" fun! Lolololololol You really hit the nail on the head with this one. Romantic in its own way and bristling with wonderful imagery and murderous intent. Now...can i borrow that hammer?.....some useless skulls need cracking! Great piece!

[AJNJ]

I get into these moods myself sometimes lol. Many a wretches could be skinned alive.
Thank you sir Brilliance for such a lively review!

[FPW]

Such a unique piece of writing! The heights of love taken to carnivorous ecstasy. I think Hannibal Lecter would have enjoyed this writing, AJ. Refreshingly original!💐💐💐

[Nix is typing...]

AJ, this was...amazing, absolutely phenomenal!!!!
LMAOOO 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
This, perhaps, maybe the best love poem I have ever ever read!!! It was so funny and different and...I really loved this, AJ. Great poem!!!

100/100

Nix ❤️️

[AJNJ]

Wow! Thanks a ton Nix! :)))))
I so truly appreciate!

[Nix is typing...]

You're so very welcome, AJ! You're such a great writer!!! 😊😊

[barleygirl]

I love the in-your-face irreverent portrait of attraction/love as bloodshed. I love how this seemingly bloody scene could symbolize how intense attraction is a sort of slaughter where (sometimes) people stop acting in their own best interests & will do ANYTHING to get their fix. This also reminded me of how many people describe babies as being so cute, they just want to eat them. There's something appealing about such concepts & you fleshed this one out vividly (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[AJNJ]

Thanks a ton Ms. Margie. I love how you saw this piece and the thought that was behind it.

[Lydia Shutter]

Alrighty then....a bit violent, but still there is romance in between the lines. Not sure if you are saying you want to be closer to a loved one or if you are ready to murder one! No matter though, well written. Lydi**

[AJNJ]

Thanks a ton Ms. Lydi. A love poem with a difference i was trying. So glad you appreciated.

[John the Baptist]

Intrusively is hardly sufficient to describe the desires expressed in this one. I believe the references are metaphorical, expressing the longing for oneness with the beloved. Otherwise, it might be mistaken for something Jack the Ripper might have said. A real cutup, that boy.

[AJNJ]

Yes he was legendary! A poet gone haywire perhaps...? Thanks a ton dear sir!

[augustus]

I feel as if I've been on a tour of the human body after having read your piece. Well written and easy to read! Thank you.

[AJNJ]

Thanks for appreciating this piece dear sir.

[The Unknown Sith]

This was a joy to read. Nice flow. I can relate to this.

[AJNJ]

Thank you so much for stopping by :)

[Fran Marie]

an intense piece
one of deliciously
dark desire and
decadent intentions
so intrusively put
into play

so many good lines
hard t o pick just
one but I like the
4th set of three
a poem with a lot
punch and bite
just like Dracula
might say
" I vant your blood" :)

nice work

[AJNJ]

Thanks a ton for appreciating this dark piece, Ms. Fran....

[Fran Marie]

you re so
vey welcome;

[Jess]

It feels like peaking inside the hidden diary of a serial killer who is trying to control themselves. Love the tone and the vivid picture you paint with every line. Well done!

[AJNJ]

Than a ton dear Jess! This is how they turn to killing....

[Neville]

I like this an awful lot ... I love the fact that you can write about stuff that some might find distasteful and I am extending an invitation now to join the club ... this art form of ours aint just about puppy dogs n kittens is it .......................... Dali once said of his wife Gala .. I intend to eat her once she is dead .. becuz that is an act of true love ... or summat like that anyway .......... Neville

[AJNJ]

Even our cats will eat us if we die alone. Doesn't mean they don't love us 😀 Thanks a ton dear sir.