Said The Fly...

Spin for me a web slyly…

From the lustrous silk

In your fulsome belly

A web so soft and slick

I bury myself sinfully

In thick, diaphanous depths

Forgetting, I am but prey

Confused, blinded deeply

By the toxins you spray

Upon my naked, tender skin

In the supple web you spin

Better than Machiavelli

Spin for me a web slyly…

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Love the metaphor here. Beware poor fly of that spider. She spins to trap, to control and then to totally consume. Yes, I do believe there are a few women out there who would do that. There are also a lot of men who would fall for it. Great write AJ. Don't be one that gets entrapped.

Chris

[AJNJ]

Thanks a ton Ms. Chris! I agree about the seductive power of some ladies! And yes yes, I always try to keep my senses about me. Intellect and not intrigue is what turns me on any day. Thanks a ton for such a great review!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A well constructed poem filled with humor and yet with a metaphorical message!

[AJNJ]

Was trying a bit of witty seduction here! Thank you for the great comment!

[TumTumTree]

Beautifully done. I love the imagery. Lines five and six are perfection.

[AJNJ]

Thank you for stopping by TumTumTree :)

[Fran Marie]

spiders are like that
yeah they are,
especially the black
widow.as she spins
her trap

vivid imagery
in this creative
and seductive
piece.i think the
spider is enjoying
her catch and the
fly doesn't care

nice work

[AJNJ]

Indeed, somewhat like a moth that doesn't mind burning in a flame. Thanks a ton for the greatly encouraging review, Ms. Fran.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

she is the spider and she is seductive as hell.....he gladly will dance into her web and lose himself in the silky serenity of her passion.
damn this is a sensual metaphor they way you spun it.

[AJNJ]

Thanks a ton dear sir! I wouldn't ever mind slipping into a web of seduction and indeed who would. *smiles sheepishly*

[Tania Mo]

Lol well I never read of sex ina spidery web. This is d first and it rocks racy stuff!

[AJNJ]

Thanks a ton Ms. Tania. Not a big fan spiders lol.

[Tania Mo]

I don't blame you

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

This is a creative write. On my second read the imagery really carved in my mind. You made something spooky to many, spiders, romantic and passionate. Golden! Tyfs

[AJNJ]

Thank you for this great review and for visiting this page!

[Neville]

.............. as far as I can see, this is a very cerebral & otherwise covertly, but oh' so very subtly erotic bit of poetry sir ... but on the other hand.. I s'pose I might just be mistaken .. nah .. it is what it is .. a nice bit of erotica :)

[AJNJ]

*Smiles covertly* Yes sir, it was indeed something quite sinful that crossed the mind :)
Thanks a ton dear sir!

[Neville]

welcome as always ....

:)

[John the Baptist]

The sensual imagery of this one alerts us to the fact that it isn't about bugs. The first impulse is to say the images are sexual, and that may be. However, the reference to Machiavelli may indicate that the spider is any person who tempts us or plays upon our human weaknesses to manipulate us. That said, I like the sexual version better.

[AJNJ]

I prefer the sexual version myself...Thanks a ton dear sir!

[T.S. Ulmus]

What a sensuous piece, almost romantic, but of course we know what happens to the fly. Also, thank you for using the word diaphanous, greatly underused word. Nice Write.

[AJNJ]

The fly is doomed...He was made to be killed. All for a good cause though :)
Thanks a ton for stopping by with such a great review sir.

[Orange]

Maybe coz only fly will be trapped.
no idea Indeed is art, but how would anyone ever describe any lady like that, unless the poison only in your head.

[AJNJ]

Ohhhh....but this is only about a spider, my friend! A lady spider, you know....I wouldn't dare describe a real lady like that 😊 The perception lies with the reader. I leave it to them totally. Thank you for your comment anyway!

[Orange]

I am sorry for my attitude,
it has been for many years, because of the wisdom and beauty of a girl.
Let those who does not know her at all, speak of her as the source of all darkness, do you know this is very unfair,
false kindness, and true kindness, there is really no difference from the outside,
but if really worth it .
why don’t you walk in and see the real colour of what, why listen to other or your own fearsz
Only look outside to see things good and bad, is this too provincial

[AJNJ]

I understand you point only too well. One must weigh people and things from their own perspective and not that which is imposed on them by others. I'm glad you shared your views here. Thanks a ton...