Bye Bye

Bye Bye

A Poem by AJNJ
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Goodbyes are so sad...

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Bye Bye, My Love

Like a hot air balloon

Fly high

It’s an empty sky

Let’s race you

To the moon

Life is so unfair

No one really cares

Trust me, you couldn’t

Be gone too soon

Blow Off, My Love

Like a hot air balloon

Vanish without

A trace

Float unhinged

In cyberspace

Crashing in a spittoon

Be Gone, Be Gone, My Love

Like a hot air balloon 

© 2020 AJNJ


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"Float unhinged in cyberspace".....now THAT is an apt description, Pestonjee! Though methinks the laws of gravity and ginormous size will conspire to have them crashing down to Earth.....much like their efforts. There is quite an eloquence to your poem and an underhanded sense of wit and delight. I sense more tears of delight than tears of sorrow. Some partings are sweet sorrow yet others are just damn good riddance. And so it is. May they drift aimless in cyberspace woofing and oinking in their failed disgrace! Victory is so sweet. Loved the poem, Pestonjee! Great work. Pop that champagne!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Thanks a ton and more Brilliance! I'm glad you could see through my tears! They're crocodile tears .. read more



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Balloons look best in the sky. So let go if it is full of hot gas. I really like your poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Thanks MisterG. You clearly got what I appreciate so much about balloons! :)
Umar Aziz

4 Years Ago

Welcome dear sir :)
Splendidly expressed write, Mr. Pestonjee. This one is imbued with witty satire, suggesting you'd love to bask in good, long sought riddance! You are so eager to bid them goodbye that you'd have the whole sky empty just for their smooth departure..Then using using "spittoon" as a rhymer for "balloon" in that manner is, brutal. Seems you really had a hard time with them.. Nevertheless, I wish you have a better experience and wish them better days as well.
Regards.

Posted 4 Years Ago


AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Hi Archishman! Thanks a ton for the great review man! Hope your weekend is fab!
God this makes me laugh so much. She floated into nowhere and landed in a spittoon. Bad wishes but nice and funny.

Posted 4 Years Ago


AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Thanks a ton Ms. Pearly. I really appreciate this.
So poetic! Such a mesmerising gentle flow of words and thoughts. She must have been terrible for you to want her to float away and crash and burn! Love the repetition and the poem overall. Great write!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

I really appreciate your great review Inessa! Thanks a ton!
A mostly humorous creation--also conveying some definite resentment and loss of patience.
"Hot air balloons" are not huggable; spittoons, less than ideal landing places.
Hope having written this, made you feel a lot better.
Entertaining post, Pestonjee!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Loss of patience. Perhaps exasperation. Finally relief. Thanks a ton dear sir!
This sounds like a failed romance complete with access to a large hot air balloon conveniently located to transport the offending lover away
I could be wrong

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

You are on point! 🤗 She's on her way to Mars! And I'm planning to stock up on them balloons. <.. read more


and about time too... this Bye Bye is long overdue... nicely byed by the way.. I kinda like the idea of hanging out in sighber space PJ keep em rollin in sir............... N :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Sighber Space! Just Brilliant! 🤗 That's just where I am now sir, albeit sighing in relief! Thanks.. read more
Neville

4 Years Ago


you are always more than welcome :)
A delightful goodbye poem. So gentle Pestonjee, floating away gracefully, not like the crash landings of some goodbyes. So visual. I have a thing about balloons. Must be the freedom they are given once released:) Happy Friday my friend.

Chris

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Balloon to me signifies release, so I liked your thoughts a lot! Letting it all go and peace rushes .. read more
Chris Shaw

4 Years Ago

Thank you, kindness reciprocated my friend.
'Up, up and away, in my beautiful, my beautiful balloon"----

waving and wishing at the same time the air would ooze out of it and she might come back
to your earth.
j.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

That would be my greatest fear, sir! Thanks a lot for your thoughts on this poem :)
The cow jumped over the moon
The dish ran away with the spoon

Who are you wishing away Pestonjee? Careful , if they return, you'll get your pulp bashed out of you and then it'll be your turn to float in space, disembodied hahaha! Jokes aside I like such light, witty poems from you more than your serious stuff. This is so you you, the original Pest! Great going.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Thanks a ton, Ms. Kat but instead of being bashed to pulp, I'd rather be beaten into a fluffy omelet.. read more
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

4 Years Ago

I'll turn you into a sausage then and deep freeze you

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