She Couldn't Dance

She Couldn't Dance

A Poem by AJNJ
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He who cannot dance puts the blame on the floor ~ Hindu Proverb

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In the kingdom of many boos 
there once lived a danseuse 
who just couldn’t dance

With her two twisted feet 
So she hid her hooves

Hemming and hawing 
at the drummer’s beat
Scared, that the public 
would make her vamoose
she made up one after 
another lame excuse
One day she’d say 
the darn music was wrong
Another day she’d say 
the wind was too damn strong
Some days she’d curse   
the swinging stage door
Yet most often she blamed 
the gleaming dance floor 
This lady always had a ruse
Oh what an absolute goose 
this oblique, obtuse danseuse

© 2020 AJNJ


Author's Note

AJNJ
"A Bad Workman Always Blames His Tools"

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It's a clever proverb you lead into the poem with, as is the more common English proverb in your Author's note. It's a sad fact of life that there are many dancers who blame the floor for their own inadequacies. If they seriously bothered to learn and address their mistakes, instead of hiding behind them and blaming all and sundry, then perhaps they would become much better dancers instead of dragging along with two left feet. It's a smart poem, Pestonjee, and one which can be related to many facets of life in general. Exit stage left, perhaps? Original writing and well conveyed.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Thank you Mr. Picasso.
JMichael

4 Years Ago

You are wonderfully welcome, Pestonjee!
AJNJ

4 Years Ago

You too dear sir :)



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I can't dance but I blame me genes... oh bring back those elasticated 501's...

I love the Hindu version of our Western workman proverb... made me smile big so ya did :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

This was a proverb in one of our school textbooks and we had mighty fun with it. Thank a ton dear fr.. read more
This is amazing, I enjoyed this.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much!
Unspoken poet

4 Years Ago

not a problem
I got all twisted up reading this...i think i need a masseuse .....wearing chartreuse ...
one is footloose.

thank you for the smile this morning, Peston.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much for such a heartening review, dear sir!
Nicely written one this poem. The proverb is classic. The indian avatar is lovely. Seems like an ancient touch here.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much Ms. Prissy. Will look at your poem soon.
This proverb is in my Hindi lessons. The moral of the story was that one must not lie about their ability. There was a school play on it also. That's why I liked this poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Thanks a ton, little guy. Yes I remember this lesson all too clearly. I’ll look forward to reading.. read more
Umar Aziz

4 Years Ago

You are welcome dear sir
I’m familiar with that saying. Nicely elaborated Pestonjee. I like the way you extended the idea and turned it into a lyrical kind of poem. You’re on a roll.

Posted 4 Years Ago


AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Thanks a ton Ms. Kat. I think it’s universal in all our CBSE textbooks. Glad that you liked it. Yo.. read more
Ahia! This is cool! I mean perfect kind of laughter stuff, I'm lot into funny things.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Sometimes one needs to be taught and shown that music can be a wonderful thing...and then the dance will follow...a fool always thinks he knows everything...a wise man looks on in silence...wonderful way you look into things...🌹🌹

Posted 4 Years Ago


AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Thanks a ton and it’s great to see you again. Looking forward to read your poetry soon.
‘Thoughts In Time’🌹

4 Years Ago

Pleasure is mine🌹🌹🌹
Yes, so much wisdom in this. The world was built on trial and error.
Even God made mistakes. Just look at the platypus. Although I do think it's quite cute.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much Ms. Ana. Your reviews always uplift me no end.

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