Hair Today

How sweet strains sour

Love is hair today

 gone tomorrow

It was copious once

Springing in youth

threaded with daisies

and orange blossoms

Unknown, the sparseness

of seasons that lay ahead

or the lice of indifference

that nibble away its roots

Sweat and toil just

burnished it some more

as two heads met in

fragrant, flowing places

And beauty was beheld

even in tousled disarray

Till the disquieting days

of grey swept in

ruffling sleek certainty

with slovenly doubt

Faith’s tresses clipped

Replaced by the fear of fall

The buoyance fell flat and

we assumed colors

from black to burgundy

But the colors leached out

The ‘perms’ never lasted

And bleached hope never

revived in steamy salons

Wispy and worn we were

left thumbing for passion

in 50 shades of grey

Author's Note

Not applicable to all ;)

Reviews

[barleygirl]

By far the best, most extensive, tightly-wrapped extended metaphor I've ever read! This even surpasses the king of extended-metaphor, the cafe's very own Jacob (with a long hyphenated last name). You took "hair" as far as hair can go. You pulled in all the grime & vermin to show how radically hair can deteriorate from that light frothy bullshit we frolicked in, in our youth! This is hilarious, clever, & biting so close to most of our hairy asses (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[AJNJ]

I kinda forgot to mention how it grows bushier and scraggier in the wrong places as it thins around the crown! Often I marvel at how closely our hairlines follow our life-and-love lines! Thanks a ton for such a great review! HUGS!

[Jimmy Yetts]

Will take all the grey hair I can get; beats baldness.
Very clever word-play.
Fun read!

[AJNJ]

Thanks a lot for the appreciation sir!

[Neville]

I like the way this flows, like my own locks they did once flow.. the time of hair peace and all that jazz... I still have all mine, although now very much a silver back, hair to stay, at least for a while :)

[AJNJ]

I personally feel silver looks fantastic on men and if one has a good crop still, then nothing like that! I've resolved to keep it natural once I go grey too.

Thank you very much for your thoughts on this poem dear sir!

[Ruth]

Awesome! I love this piece...not only cleverly thought through and out but speaks volumes about the demise and vibrancy - excellent :)

[AJNJ]

Thanks a lot for such an encouraging review Ms. Ruth. Means a lot.

[Robert Trakofler]

Did somebody say Hare today? My hair never grew back fully after it was all shaved off in the Air Force LOL consequently so did my first true love after the air force perhaps I should now call it the Hair Force now LOL I don't mind so much about the hair but I am quite sure I never loved like that again. What a very clever analogy Mr Peston this did give the Bunny a chuckle:)

[Pennywriter]

Sir.How was your experience in the Hair Force?

[Robert Trakofler]

I had many very close shaves but somehow I emerged

[AJNJ]

Thank you kind sir Bunny :) Sharing chuckles with you and my friend here, is a great joy. I hope you're having a great evening :)

[Chris Shaw]

Love and hair, easy come easy go in some cases. I appreciated the humour in this piece and smiled when I remembered my own dear husband's thick black hair when we first met. Luscious, with a slight curl. The love lasted, alas the hair didn't. Beth our granddaughter who lives with us often teases him about being follicly challenged. He takes it very well. Says to her that his once thick hair just waved goodbye to him one day. Once in his fifties the greying started, then the thinning. It must be difficult for men, women don't experience the loss of hair in the same way although the loss of colour is inevitable. Your use of descriptive language in this piece is superb. A light hearted read, although maybe for some men who suffer, maybe some wishful thinking. Yes, maybe some returning to days of former glory.

Chris

[AJNJ]

I wonder how it will be for me...I had hairloss once after a bout of an illness and it was extremely stressful for me. I didn't sleep for days. Tried hordes of treatmenst and even quackery till it grew back :)
Thanks a ton and more for sharing your experiences and views on this poem. It means very much, Ms. Chris!

[Chris Shaw]

I had hair loss too going through chemo. It was more difficult anticipating it happening than when it did. It grew back. I think hair loss is in the genes. When it happens as you grow older maybe it is a bit easier to accept. Hair isn't everything. My husband has so many good qualities and is so well loved, the hair loss to me is of no significance:)

[AJNJ]

I really find such strength and an unshakaeable faith and love in your words, Ms. Chris. And I so admire it! No storm or season can shake a tree with such deep roots. Kudos!

[Pennywriter]

Being a man full of vanity, I love this poem. A true lesson of humility.

[AJNJ]

Thank you very much sir.

[John the Baptist]

Some good imagery in this one ("lice of indifference"). A somber comment on the vagaries of love. Would you settle for 10 shades?

[AJNJ]

Not sure if I can answer that one correctly. Perhaps, yes, if they're pleasing enough. Thank you so much for appreciating this poem sir.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Great poem Pestonjee. Need I say more.... ;)
Keep writing with not a care about anything else. Just do what you love.
I'll be there.

[AJNJ]

Thanks for being here Ms. Kat. It means so much.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

You're most welcome Pesty :)