Let's Collaborate!

I often wish for this :)

Shy girl with the loaded gun
It's time for us to have some fun
I love your words and you love mine
A poem would be oh so fine!

This virtual lane is full of steam
My love is bursting at the seams
So let's just not leave it to fate
Ooh come on girl, let's collaborate

And this is how we should begin
This sweetly soulful ditty of sin
You touch me here, I touch you there

Do hold that pout and flick your hair

 

You know I’m a visual kind of poet

A hot pic of you’d so help this duet

Uff! Show me those bodacious bombs
My bard will bob and chuck his tomb

I know you want us to align

And steal me of my lovely lines

It’s easy if you tease me long

Just smother me in lacy thongs

 

With a waist as pliant as silk twine
Those eyes that slosh with Merlot wine

I’m sure we’ll churn out ballads rich

Just be my sorceress, be my witch

Quick! Pull me down the slippery-slip
Oh! Let me touch those swollen lips

My mockingbird of love doth sing
Oh!  Tie me up in your g-strings

 

So come on babe, let’s coproduce
Our couplets and our songs to spruce

We’ll blow ‘em off, we’ll knock ‘em dead

Let’s collaborate in sinful red!

Author's Note

Just some fun in AABB rhyming scheme :)

Reviews

[M]

This was quite a delight to read. Such a fast paced poem with flawless rhymes and plenty of humour. I could never collaborate with anyone on any art form, personally. It's something we should keep sacred for ourselves and only share the finished outcome with others. Creativity is highly personal in my opinion. I enjoyed this poem, AJNJ. A skillfully written poem.

[AJNJ]

Thanks a ton, Ms. Makhabat. I really appreciate the review.

[NotUsinganymore]

Very erotic and nice poem, I enjoyed it a lot!

[AJNJ]

Thank you JungLee! Really appreciated :)

[NotUsinganymore]

You are welcome. c: Please check out my new poem!

[AJNJ]

Oh ofcourse! Checking it out right away my friend :)

[NotUsinganymore]

Thank you c:

[AJNJ]

😊👍......

[Chris Shaw]

Ha ha, what wit and so much fun in these lines. There are so many collaborations in the artistic field of dance and song which have been done with such awesome skill, however methinks you are having a poke at poetic twosomes. Once upon a time, many years ago I do confess to being lured into a poetic duet. What a mistake that was. He published after the first draft, before I got a chance to exercise my red pen. I have to tell you the only red on show was the embarrassed cheeks I sported. I love the flow of these lines and it is good to see an AABB rhyming scheme done so well. I also enjoy rhyme and meter as much as free verse. Needless to say, I have never been tempted again to perform another poetic foxtrot. I go solo these days. I don't want to share the ballroom floor :))

Some of your responses here are awesome.

Chris

[AJNJ]

I tried it a few times and it felt like hurricane all over the ballroom floor. They say it takes two to tango but I'd rather not go for it if I risk breaking a leg. I enjoyed your story very much and it just underlines the basic loss of control one feels in such endaevours. Writing is an intimate experience for most and I felt stripped sharing it with another. Thanks a lot for adding your thoughts to this piece, Chris. Perhaps fun and wit are a great tool in driving home a point. I am learning always :)

[.]

An excellent write of satire and whimsy, sir. Your flow, rhythm and rhyme is extremely well constructed and the theme is hilarious in itself. Collaborations of any kind, poetically or dance require a complete melding of the souls for perfection to be attained. Anything other than that, it all becomes a mess of flailing arms or words and misplaced rhythm. So, I would advise you to leave the collaborations to the Keystone Kops and attain written perfection yourself. Your pen is in fine form, sir. A pleasure to read.

[AJNJ]

Your advise is taken and assimilated well sir. I can write a thesis on why people SHOULD collaborate. Human alliance & cooperation is a subject anyone can wax eloquent on. Thats not my point at all here. I'm just out to have some fun haha. Who doesn't want a hot and sweet duet to sing from time to time? Now that's something that get's our juices flowing lol ;)

[.]

Haha! I would hardly call it "eloquent", Mister P! More like off topic, trumpet blowing of the delusional mind. Any fool can copy paste off wikipedia! The reality about modern collaboration is simple; it leads to a spoonfed generation, lacking independence and suffering anxiety and mental disorders in astronomical numbers. Then again....we WERE just talking about poetry, right? Lol. A fine summation here, Monsieur Tomato.

[AJNJ]

Yes Madame. Lets be very specific about the type of collaboration here. if we generalize and label eveything in creation and under the sun as "Collaboration' then I might add that I am very thankful to my a*****e for clearing me of all the toxic waste generated overnight! Indeed, that's the best collaboration if we have to generalize!
So let's not extend the the definition of poetic collaboration and ramble on like idiots!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is quite clever, don't choke on that G-string, they can be quite dangerous.
So can a collaboration in which you give your all to share with her, and she takes the money, all the money and runs off with the verse as well, publishes it under her name alone. And you are left broke and wordless.
j.

[AJNJ]

I laughed so loud when I read your words that I choked sadly not on the g-string but on the water I was sipping. Your sense of humor is awesome and so appreciated. Thank you for the good laughs today evening :)))

[gram linski]

there is a nice dance of wit and desire in this one, not taking yourself too seriously can be good for the brain, sometimes cool poem

[AJNJ]

A laugh a day keeps the doctor away. To be funny, one must be able to laugh at oneself first. Thanks a ton for the great review :)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Thanks for the read request for this one, pesty. This poem is quite funny so that's a plus. I like light humour myself though I haven't had the time to write any myself lately. As for Collaborations, I always shy away from them as I cannot make myself understood very well. I do admire people who can pull it through but I find such works rare. With this poem you have put me off collabs hahaha. Meow!

[AJNJ]

Thanks a lot for answering my request so fast Ms. Kat. For some reason I thought this poem is up your alley and so i hurriedly pushed it to you for a look. As for collabs, hahaha, you are safe from me as I like them with ladies and not with kitties. Appreciated much Maa'm. Many thanks.

[.]

Lol! A wonderful piece of satire, Monsieur P! This one flows so smoothly and with a lovely rhythm; just like a collaborative waltz down the page. Even though it concerns collaborative writing, the poem had me thinking of Fred Astaire and Ginger Rogers in action, except with the heat turned up quite a few notches! There are some hilarious lines throughout and it all comes together wonderfully well in the end. It's an excellent satirical achievement. As for the collaborations.....you already know my thoughts on them. They will never be my cup of tea, even if my own opinion on them has me labelled "quiet the wane" by a certain illiterate dunce here! Some delusional fascists can't handle freedom of expression. A wonderful poem, here. Very well written. :))

[AJNJ]

Hello Madame!
And with this writing we have come a full circle on the subject of collaborations, wink wink ;)

I am always dying to make people laugh so I am thrilled it works here though you are always so kind to me. For such great artists to be named in the same breath as this poem is an honour for me.

As for freedom of opinion and the fforts of some control freaks to curtail it, we all know the fate of Mussolini :)

Many heartfelt thanks for always reviewing every poem of mine with such thoughtfulness. You are the best says this pest!

[AJNJ]

*****efforts*******