GATES TO INSANITY

IN A MENTAL ASYLUM

PADLOCKS PICKET PANICKED PAIN

HADES HOLLERS, HOWLS, HARRUMPHS

HYLAEUS’S HOLOCAUST, HANNIBAL’S HIDEOUS HELL

GOD'S GREMLINS, GOG MAGOG GRIMACE

BRAIN BRUTALIZES BALEFUL BRAIN

 

SURREAL SPIRITS SAUNTER SPACES SEALED

SUCCUBUS SANCTIFIED, SISYPHUSIAN STRAIN

SPITEFUL STRAITJACKETS SIPHON SPIRITS SLAIN

SATANIC STRENGTH SUCKING STRAIGHTCHAINS

 

FECAL FLESH, FEARSOME FORMALDEHYDE FUMES

ARCHFIEND’S EGGS INCUBATE INSIDIOUS

HALOTHANE HUSHED HATE HISSES

INSIDE INCUBUS EIDOLON’S EYES INSANE

 

ELECTRICALLY EVISCERATE ENTITY’S ESSENCE ETHANE

LUGUBRIOUS LIPS LOLL LULLED LISTLESS

SOUR-SPITTLED SILENCE SAVORS SUDORIC STAINS

SERRATED STRAPS SLIT SOILED SKIN

RABID RHABDOID RAMPAGE, RUINOUS RESTRAIN

 

BALAAK BALAAM BELLEROPHONE BRISEUS BRISBANE

HALLUCINATING HOWLING HECATOMB HUMANE

CALIGULA CANNIBALIZES CURSED CADAVER OF CAIN

WINDOWLESS VESTIBULES WAIL IN VAIN

 

Author's Note

Loosely rhymed. Enjoy!

Reviews

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What to make of this one, monsieur Pestonjee? It's very strongly written and phantasmagorical in its alliterated alienation of poetic masturbation! Unlike most other thesaurus induced vomits on the page, your poem has flow, essence and economy of words; keeping the piece nice and tight and allowing the reader to stay in the zone you intend them to be as they read. Your final two lines are an impressive way to summarise the poem, they stand out for me in regards to your hallucinatory theme. Overall, an impressive piece of poetic shock therapy for the mental mind! :)

[AJNJ]

I am blushing. Thank you Ms. Jamila :)
Was trying create meaning in a chaotic scene. I'm glad you enjoyed this theme.
As for those thesaurus induced vomits that you mentioned, well, I'm still somewhat sane and therein lies the difference. :)

[Jimmy Yetts]

Astonishingly alliterative.
A fiendishly clever creation, AJ.
Quite a read!

[AJNJ]

Thanks a ton, dear sir! Enjoyed writing this.

[Neville]

a veritable word salad sir with more than a smattering of clang association and manic mayhem loosely associated with knights move thinking and a touch of abstracticity for good measure...

I think you have done an excellent job of grouping societies main stereotypical perspective of those poor souls lost to the asylums of yesteryear....

Neville

[AJNJ]

Thanks a ton dear sir! 🤗

[Neville]

... and welcome as always ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

could almost go insane reading this...the reality induced by the streaming alliteration...like that voice in the head beating like a drum...
no escape...hope the padding in the room is thick...because now that i have read this...it is time to beat it against the walls...
the words are closing in.
j.

[AJNJ]

The frenzied current state of the world. The super speedy highway of life. The fast pace of unfolding events are enough to drive us all a bit insane. Yes. The deafening beat of the drums is closing in and we hope for extra thick padding!
Thank you sir, for the beautiful review.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Whoa! This is way way spookier than my own scary poem I posted recently! I am loving it and getting spooked by it in big turns. How did you think of such evil sounding things Pestonjee? Or maybe its just the working of a truly evil mind. In which case this kitty relates a lot. Meowwww.

[AJNJ]

We'll have a competition on who's more evil then :)
Thanks a lot for appearing on this page.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Sounds like life on Earth...leading to insanity if you don’t guard your heart and thoughts...amazing write....🌹🌹

[AJNJ]

I love that thought!
Hell and heaven our our own minds and hearts. So how carefully we must guard them and what goes into them!
Thanks a lot, Thought In Time!

[¿]

It's such a big paradox that in an asylum patients are treated by a well maintained course or routine just to make them fit in the already-gone-crazy world! After bleaching the brains in the asylum they're no longer suitable for any place existing.
The lines are brilliantly placed and the pattern seems difficult for me, well done!

[AJNJ]

Then I will write something that's simpler for you my dear Tahsin :) Tell me what are you favorite topics and I will attempt a poem on it. Or we can write it together?
As for the asylum patients, I doubt there is much hope for effective rehabilitation for them. Mental illnesses are chronic and one can cope with it but not totally get over it. I do find their inner world fascinating though. This is where this writing came from. Thank you for reviewing me so kindly! I'm coming to your page watch out! :)

[¿]

Am honoured to hear that😇 yet I believe you will write extraordinarily great with your interests, mine mind is like praises and hates love poems, varies with mood, irony. Never doing collabs, I find too myself a nut in teamwork :D You're always welcome and galore thanks for writing amazing-s!♧

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice. I liked the photos and I loved the strength of the words. I have known madness often in my life. Sometime we are more safe in madness than sanity. Outstanding poetry shared.
Coyote

[AJNJ]

Thank you for that awesomely compelling thought dear sir! I love it as you say, sometime we are more safe in madness than sanity. Perhaps, a lot of madness is to cocoon ourselves from all the pain of the world! Thanks for adding such value to this effort by me.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree my friend. Madness keep the bad things away from us. You are welcome and I enjoyed these words.

[lightsong]

since English is my second language the words were hard for me to read and to understand the sentences and meanings completely, my sense felt it was forced, exactly how it feels being in a mental asylum, the intense words with the capitalization made it feels like a profound darkness, actually like hell... and this what I believe You intended it to be.

[AJNJ]

It’s just great to see Lovely Light on my page! Thanks Light! In the coming days I’ll try to write on everything under the sun I find fascinating. Hopefully, there will be something you’ll really enjoy. For now your words of appreciation are enough for me :) Many thanks! 💐

[lightsong]

read Your own reviews and comments I'm sure something will come to Your mind, they are sweet and filled with loveliness🌸 and You are so welcome my friend :)

[AJNJ]

Thanks a lot, for it means a lot!
🌹😊🙏
I’ll keep trying, my dear friend.

[Dave Brown]

A very impressively illiterated account of what might pass through a tortured souls brain,
Much the same as I'm feeling as I watch my investments freefalling
Also an impressive collection of words that I'll have to sit down with my dictionary and decipher
Very well done

[AJNJ]

It’s interesting where a word-fest can lead us. I enjoyed writing this. Regarding the free-fall in your investments, my shares in many sectors have nose-dived too but let’s be optimistic as they say the recovery will be rapid once the crisis resolves. In fact, I’m planning to buy airline stocks :) So all the best and many many thanks for reading, Dave.

[Dave Brown]

UR more than welcome