On The Rooftop.

Been standing on the rooftop multiple times

Took a jump once or twice

Ready to leave it all behind

Nothing really mattered

Dark shadows shoving their c***s down my throat

Waiting; for me to swallow their sweet juices.

 

 

I can’t lay my head down

Living on a trail of lies

Lies I never knew would destroy me

Just another girl to destroy

Nothing more than a good f**k.

 

Left with no choice

Never been loved

Never really cared

Never been appreciated

Never really gave a damn.

 

Wanted to dance on your grave for so long

Never really had the chance

Living Deaths scream

Ripping my heart out

Scarred my scars open

Screaming; “YOU WON’T GET OUT ALIVE!”

 

Yet I will get out alive

I will rise above the rail of lies

I won’t bend over; I won’t take it all in

Never willing to swallow your sweet juices

Never willing to give in to you

I will never take the jump off of the rooftop.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Opinion As Always~

Reviews

[nevermindfan1991]

You never fail to disappoint me. Your poems always filled with passion and vigor that can make anyone shake. This was one of the best that I've read. Great Job!

Good poem overall. Caught me off guard a little. Strong and angry to start. Self realization can be a rebirth. I like the way you tied in the ending.

[Becky C Strukamp]

A poem of realization, awakening, and moving forward. Nice write.

[Carrion.]

the last two lines in the first parathingy are fierce.
It's a good poem. I enjoyed it.

[Hello, Goodbye]

I understand where the message derives from and the need for emotional hyperbolic description.. it is a overtaking feeling that knows no reason and forsakes logic.. a poetic expression that is not difficult to relate to, when it comes to particular thoughts of the past, no doubt..

[FallenHeroXx]

Never loved? That's a damn lie man..
Never been apreciated? Lies...

[Dahlia Phoenix]

This was intense but it made me depressed as you continued. The thing I admire about your writing is the fact that you don't bullshit and use what comes to your mind besides using the usual soft scenarios which everyone knows is lies. Lies are life consuming but the last stanza did it for me because even through all the s**t, you move on and don't let that kind of s**t make you weak but stronger.

"Yet I will get out alive

I will rise above the rail of lies

I won’t bend over; I won’t take it all in

Never willing to swallow your sweet juices

Never willing to give in to you

I will never take jump off of the rooftop"

Awesome poem.

[....]

I felt this as a truthful, honest write. This is just more than words. It's a group of feelings that come alive in the heart. So nicely done....xo

[Marie Harrison]

That's right, never give up!
Walk away and start something
new and better.
Wonderful poem of angst
and hope too.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

The contrast in ideals between the first and last stanza is masterful, how the thinking has developed in terms of taking the 'jump' and ending it all to seeing the light. Between that the poem adds meat to it just so well, love it :)