Choking On Your Lies.

Living a nightmare

No light is to find

Feeling a rage within;

Coming from the memories for you.

 

A pierced heart;

Tries to cover it all up

Nothing seem to be bearable

How come I should move on?

 

Living a lie

False hope, is for me to find

Feeling a relieve as I slice my veins open

Watching it all come crashing down.

 

My whole life is cracking

This time there's nothing to do

I won't keep breathing

It's way too late to save my living self.

 

You know, I loved you with all my heart

No matter how much damage you caused me

I was waiting for you

But I do not see you

You've left my sight.

 

I needed to hear you say;

"I love and need you by my side..."

Yet, I do not give a s**t anymore

I do not need you the way I did back then.

 

I've been staring blank at the wall

Waiting for a reason to live

I do not feel a loving hand

I do not want you to be my wall

I won't lean on you.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Opinion As Always~

Reviews

[FemmeSpookyCorpse]

I love this, my dear! This piece is powerful, raw and dances in darkness and your points are straightforward and sharp. Each line grows evermore powerful...the emotion in this piece is stinging! Great work! = ]

-Femme_Gothique (Brittany)

[Chris]

I don't want to be numb...


Chris

[nevermindfan1991]

Aggressive, powerful, poignant like all your poems. This was a great read and you were able to describe your feelings in so much detail without bogging it down. Another great poem. Good Job!

[Becky C Strukamp]

The emotions in this poem are so much of what I have experienced so I know the intensity. Another fine poem, well penned.

Good poem filled with emotion and passion. If I may... The last three stanzas get choppy. Try to avoid using "I" so often and close together. example, in the fifth stanza 'I was waiting for you' drop the 'i was' the statement is the same but more direct. Hope this helps, yes this is a good poem.

[Jeremy Baker]

Sometimes life can be a drag. I like this poem for its honesty and wililngness to show vulnerability. Good writing.

[Carrion.]

I like it. very good. reminds me of a re hab stage in a realationship, the girls finally over him but the memories and scars of what shes done haunt her.