Hold On Tight.

Hold on tight

I won’t bow to the presence of you

I’ll turn my back

I won’t let you let you hit me straight

If you’re going to shove a knife deep into my spine

I won’t slit my throat with the bloody knife

A little whisper from within

Nothing more than a prayer

Whispers to me; Please Take Me Back

Yet I’ll turn my back to you

Wish your sanity good luck

It had a one-way ticket to far far away

Your voice has turned into a whisper

A whisper I ignore

You ripped my heart in two

It were just a game to you

Since you left me in the side road of my life

I’ve been able to take a deep breath

Just to feel the air fulfil my lungs

I won't pick up the pieces you left

You know, I' took a step further

Nothing will be the same

You left me undone

Yet I've stitched my broken heart.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Opinion As Always.

Reviews

[Calypso]

This poem has strength and hope. Yet has pain and hurt.

[Stormy Weather]

There is alot to this, it's genius. Love it!

[Daytonight]

Wow! What a lot you said in this poem and it really packed quite a punch. Well done. Keep up the great work.

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard and direct words in this poem. We all learn the hard way. Before opening doors. Insure you know what the person want and what you are willing to give.
"Whispers to me; Please Take Me Back
Yet I’ll turn my back to you
Wish your sanity good luck"
I like the ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Please take me back......whispers to me. Why? Now I can feel the air in my lungs as I breathe. I will continue on with my back turned because your sanity had a one way ticket to far, far away. You know if I take a step back towards you, nothing would be the same. I came undone but I have mended my broken heart. Very well penned!

[Just Cat]

Strong, vivid and powerful. Just WOW.
Great work! :)

[FemmeSpookyCorpse]

This piece conveys so much strength that my heart smiled as I read it. Every word hits the brainstem so hard, but in an amazing way. This is beautiful work, my dear = ]

[light and ashes]

A beautiful empowering poem.

[Jeremy Baker]

All your writing that I've read conveys strength and empowerment, but this is particularly good. I really liked the image of the one-way ticket, a warning not to mess with you any longer. This poem still captures a raw sense of hurt, but you're also developing a sense of sophistication in the way you craft the ideas, too. If this is based on people and events in your life, I hope you find strength and change soon. Great writing!

[Valandil93]

Good job once again. I'm beginning to really get into your writing. You convey emotion so well.