Little Girl.

Little girl in the rain

Walking alone, no one care

All you see is dark shadows

The one you love doesn’t notice your pain.

 

Love is all you give

Nothing more than pain is what you receive

You really wish for a better life

Yet it seem to be out of reach.

 

You walk around in silence

No one see the breaking heart; behind your fake smile

Couples walk around hand in hand

All you wish is; someone to understand.

 

Pain’s eating you up from within

You feel your heart break when you see THEM

Cuddling and kissing down the street

He see right through you, as if you were air.

 

But…

He doesn’t think about it in that way.

He need air to survive.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Opinion As Always.

Reviews

[Forest Green]

Well done; your poem is finely crafted, touching upon the pain of loneliness with meaningful lines and complete honesty. It's difficult to be alone when everywhere it seems romance abounds. Eventually though, the one will appear that takes the loneliness away.

Nice work...

[Layla Anne Massaro]

I enjoyed reading this. I love your poems. :D

[Namelezz]

Little girl sitting in the rain, let me comfort you and get rid of your pain.
Girl o' girl with the cirly hair, I wan't to give you all my air.
Beautiful girl with the greenblue eyes, if you wan't new smiles look into the skies.

[Thea]

Great emotion, I felt it in some lines... :)

[nevermindfan1991]

Another great emotional and powerful poem. I loved this! Great job!

[Gilbert Saint]

Its good, but i have to ask, why most of your work is emotional. It might be good to add something else in your library, show the side of the fallen heroine that people don't know, give your readers something new. Its good work all the same.

[Lily Mae]

You continue to move your emotions forward in your writes.. it's a great write expressing those deep seeded emotions about being invisible to those we want..xx

[Becky C Strukamp]

Lots of different emotions in this one. That's what I am sensing. Well penned. I love it.

[sarah]

This is so great! So strong and full of strong emotions it flows sooo well and it is just such a great write!

[Carrion.]

very good.
when you reffered "little girl"
It shows a past presence, that has changed.(:
I enjoyed it:D