Without You.

Its been 38 days without him..

“I can’t… I’m sorry..”

Its been 38 days without you

I’ve nearly reached the end.

 

I walk around in silence

My life is so hollow

I’m so devastated.

 

I feel your hands in mine every each time I walk down the street

Your arms around me in my sleep

And I see you everywhere I go.

 

Your presence still linger here

I can’t forget about you

You’re haunting my dreams.

 

Nightmares become daymares

I feel you no matter what I do

How come can I get through?

 

My life seem to be worthless

No, I’m not worth saving

I gave you my heart.

 

You are the only one I want to spend my life with

But you threw it in a car and walked away¨

Nothing seem to be real anymore.

 

So I walked into your room today

With a gun in my hand, I pointed it at my head

You screamed no and ran up to me

I shed a tear and blew my brain out.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Opinion As Always.

Reviews

[Nate E. Flake (Cösmic ..]

emotion elevates in this piece, this is probably why I like it and the concluding stanza is the stunning end result. I think we should always work on vividly explaining our stories without actually signaling what is happening. This is part of what makes literature an art form.

[brenda]

oh , sad its hard sometimes to forget a person especially of you cant live withouth them but nice poem !:)

[Calypso]

Great write. Very true.

[Dream Weaver]

Dark and emotive in such sullen words.
You can feel the desperation in every
word...

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

you can write lotsa nice works like these right into your old age (*_*)

[Daytonight]

Wow! Very strong emotions. Vivid imagery. Really touched me. Keep on penning.

[Daydreamer54]

Wow depressing...it kinda reminded me of Evanescence's song My Immortal at the begiining.

Nice work. Love the details you put to picture different situations...It does show the pain.

[Niki Wilson]

Aww.. :( Thats gotta be sad..

[Dragon]

Whoa. Extreme words you used and nice a details on the scenes. Hope this is just a fake that you didn't do this...Sorry about that. Anyways, this is a great poem and with all the descriptions you gave into this is real nice, in a way. Love the read. :)