The King And Queen.

I watched you in awe; you were my king

I was your queen

Together we sat on our thrones

As we sat there; staring into each others eyes

The whole world disappeared, everything else didn’t matter

An electric shock ran down my spine, every each time your gentle fingers touched my cheek

Your lips; the touch of a feather

Your arms were my castle

Your heart my sky

All out of sudden a serpent crept up to him, winded up to his ear and whispered

“Dear King do it, take a chance, I’ll save your royal a*s.”

The whole world were shaking of the kings choice

A Raven rose from his Queens mouth

A dead body hit the floor, his lovely queen fell

Now he knows, what he did was wrong.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Opinion As Always.

Reviews

[Rose of Gondor]

O.o ... ... ... um....the end was kind of...scary random????

[Gilbert Saint]

good use of animate objects,snake,

[alerodri]

power full, unexpected turn and symbolism nice really intence

[bluessadmood]

this was beautiful..how you told it so well,typical of dear everyday life
where nothing lasts forever ,just as everything was going smooth and fine
that touch sent me wild ,eyes made us look crazy like drank lots of wine
fingers dragged on my spine ,it all did fibrillate,and i shook like a feather
ohh heart sweet heart how i cling to you ,just in a while its like a snake
envolped you and turned you into a piece of dark ..and strange,
how short it all did sound and suddenly it all did end,and all sudden
lovely write..

[ivizarx]

twisted work with a plot twist... kinda dark but really liked it yo, great job

[Maimai]

Nice one, love it :) Keep writing x

[Calypso]

Full of passion, full of anger too

[Sukriti Suki]

Nice one....deep and dark. Nice. Imagery here is very good.

[frozensakura]

nice job i like it(:

[Coyote Poetry]

Better to be the Queen in-charge. Men will mess things up. A interesting poem. Sometime the savior pay the price to be a hero. I like the ending to the strong poem. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote