Disguise of kindness

This isn't over

it will never be

the hate fills me up

the rage appears.

 

 

Nothing can change it

nothing can seperate the hate and I

I builded it up

no one will ever ruin in

like walls of a castle.

 

 

You're so f*****g cold and fake

your smile nothing but a fake disguise

the sparkle in your eyes

you're pretending to be nice.

 

 

You know how to drag me to hell

you know how to piss me off

you know how to make me swear.

 

Leave me alone you bloody w***e.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Oppinion Please.

Reviews

[M.Babu]

This isn't over
it will never be
the hate fills me up
the rage appears.
Powerful start! I really liked this poem. The words have such robustness packed behind them they deliver the hate your despise very articulately. Wonderful description and i loved the simile ...like walls of a castle...great poem i liked this a ton!

[Cynthia]

A Powerful write, the emotions are great, and its really hard to ignore your feeling. Its so strong, so powerful. I hope you're feeling fine, sometimes, people are just plain fake. Just ignore them, make friends with real people, who treat you right!
A Powerful and strong write, especially the emotions, they are the strongest elements of your poems!

[iamkim]

See? Real emotions could create a good writing. Nice job!

[kyrie]

I love the intensity, the force, the way you stand your ground against even the thought of being trampled. It is good to know the disguise, and to break it down to its limits.

[Midday_Mystery]

Nice Job. Emotion so intence and fervent... Marvellous write Great Job!!!!

[*skittlez*]

very good

Great stuff A Fallen Heroine. I really enjoy how you use your anger and emotions to turn it into killer poetry!
I hope you can sort things out between this person that you write about. Message me if you ever want to talk. I'm here for you!

[FallenHeroXx]

Nice write.

Great with the anger and the hate here. I loved that whole "You know how to drag me to hell, you know how to piss me off, you know how to make me swear" Stanza. Really good to see that even though you grown so much. You're still able to kick peoples balls with your hardcore poetry. It's not because I'm so into hate and anger writing, except for when the talented are writing it. Yeah babe you got talent. You better f*****g use it. And by the way, ask for help on anything okay? And that whole collab thing's gotta be done again? :)

Best regards Fallen

[Apathy To Empathy]

Wow...All i can say is, hun, I'm in the same zone as you, anger, depression, ect. every last bit expressed what it's hard for me to Such a great write

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

Wow powerful stuff great raw emotions I can see you frantically typing this in anger obviously from someone your not liking and although your hating them its becoming your muse and is making your work appeal to me so much another great write

100/100