A Broken Heart.

This poem got two P.O.V's my ex's and mine.

His P.O.V

 

A heart breaking

a lonesome soul

covered in cracks

bleeding cracks

I'm bleeding to death.

 

 

The agony

I can't handle it

I won't live in this world

created by the devil

or that's what I mean.

 

My eyes

dead

cold

filled with tears

no sparkle.

 

Dead inside

I can't see anything but darkness

I won't get out

is suicide the only way out?

Hell yes...

 

 

My P.O.V

 

I can hear his heart breaking

your soul so empty

the cracks is easy to see

there's no way in hell you can hide them

there's nothing I can do..

 

The agony will disappear

it won't last forever

I keep telling you to stay

yet my words doesn't affect you.

 

As I look into your eyes

for just one second

I see the death

the long for hurting yourself

the sparkle is gone

your eyes is blank

there's no feeling in them just the long for death.

 

I can feel how he's dead inside

his eyes shows it perfectly

the darkness has surrounded him

in every possible way

it's almost impossible for him to find the light

No way in hell

suicide ain't the only solution.

 

 

Author's Note

The first P.O.V is from my ex and the second one is mine.
This isn't a collab...
Ignore Grammar Problems Please.
Honest Oppinion please...~

Reviews

[kyrie]

Touching. When hearts break for another.... It is more fulfilling to help others than to perfect yourself. Sometimes, we must let them go. :( *hugs tight*

[iamkim]

nice! it already happened and you cannot turn back time anymore. what you have to do now is not just move on but also move forward :)

[Cynthia]

Its really wonderful, I love it. Its so sad, but really, you can't blame it all to yourself. All you need to do is be sure you do nothing you will regret, and thats all! Just look to the front and continue, let it go, this will pass, for you, for him.

[Amanda_Rose]

interseting. i like the 2 pov-thing.

[Chelsea]

Blah ex boyfriend huh! They suck sometimes, I can relate to that one!
But I guess we have to let go of them and grow. It's easier said than done!
Hope your okay!
And heehee but at least you have Fallen!

[FallenHeroXx]

Now this was a really great write..
Sad but true.. He's a poor f**k.. And i really understand his situation..
But the sadness will disappear.. Light will appear for him.. Someday..
But hey.. Cheer up.. It's not all your fault..

Great job :)

Fallen

[Midday_Mystery]

This is wonerful write... Sad but wonderful Thank you for sharing it Sandra

[Miles Evens]

This is a pretty good piece
you can deffintly feel the darkness which you are trying to portray
I like how you show both points of view
all in all this is a really good piece
keep writing