Fight.

Yeah, I might sound like a f*****g phsyco...

Was this over before it ever began?
I fell in love with your littlest sin
Yes your f*****g sins.

How come could I be so dumb?
so f*****g blind?
so f*****g desperate?

All the pain I thought I knew
is nothing compared to what I feel
what I feel when I think of how you treated me.

As you touch me
I feel a fire burning in my hands
how I wish they was able to hit your cheek!

My fist right against your nose
your mouth
your forehead
yes I'm not able to stop it now
I have to let out the f*****g anger
the f*****g agony
my f*****g sadness.

You're heeding to the hospital
my fist is covered in your blood
the blood from your nose
yes from your face
how I love it.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems Please.
Yeah, I might sound like some weird phsyco... sorry about that.

Honest Oppinion Please.

Reviews

[alec merdin]

grim and beautiful at the same time and very descriptive and something i can relate to rather easily. I enjoyed it quite a bit

[M.Babu]

"You're heeding to the hospital
my fist is covered in your blood
the blood from your nose
yes from your face
how I love it."
This line said it all:) We all need to let it all out and your poem sums up so well what we all experience sometimes. Magnificent power in the words and you've put it in a universal way-everyone can relate to this poem.
You have come a long way in your poetry and i love just how well you've improved. Good one right here!! Keep on writing!

[kyrie]

The need to make them suffer, the shame of the memories they scarred you with, the release of mangling their body..... It is a rush. It comes, it burns ever-bright, and then it collapses in sweet release. It is raw. It takes no mind of who is around us, it blinds perfectly so it can come full force, and it burns both you and the other. But alas, it is release. Well-written. I ffel it, I relate to it, I wish for it. All the time. Again, very well-written.

[Dream Weaver]

Two words: Anger management! Besides that, very well
written...

[Amanda_Rose]

awesome. so agressive. i love it. when i read it i feel like IM the mad one and i get pumped up and wanna punch that guy too ;) nice poem

[FallenHeroXx]

Great...

Fallen

[Just Charles]

The poem kind of races down the page. I wonder if the male antagonist in this poem raced to the hospital as fast as the poem read. Nice poem! Very aggressive and you, the writer, develops a firm grip on the scene.

[Chelsea]

Looks good A Fallen Heroine! I really like how this one tells a story within the poem... The story of a hurt girl retaliating, that's what I got anyways!
I especially love the line...
Was this over before it ever began?

This is so powerful. Life feels like that to me. It's so full of s**t I kind of think it was pre-destined to suck!! I really love this line, a great use of words!
Your poetry keeps getting better and better as I read! Keep up the good stuff!

[Marie Harrison]

I really love the aggressive voice in your poem. I'm not sure I liked the word choice heeding, it forces the reader to focus on that word use in the poem instead of the message. That's just my opinion. Very successful poem.

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

This was an awsome poem .. very violent and Aggressive.. You always express yourself well, and I love reading each of your poems.... You are an awsome writer and a great expressionist