Get Away.

You’re trying to take him away from me

What the hell are you thinking of!

You know you’ll break me into a helluva lut pieces!

Damn I hate you!

I wish you to hell

Leave right away!

 

 

 

Beautiful lies

Yet so f*****g fake

A whole heart

shattered into a helluva lut pieces

a smily face

a f*****g fake smile.

 

 

You have no idea what agony is

You have no idea

how it would feel to loose the one you love

Your life

Your true love

No one should ever feel that sort of agony.

 

 

How come can you be so heartless

Trying to steal him away

Trying to kiss him

Trying to kill me that way!

 

 

So cold

So heartless

Yes what a fake person!

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems Please.
Honest Oppinion.
I know this ain't that poetic as it could be, but I had to let out some anger...

Reviews

[Marie Harrison]

I love the raw grit and passion of this poem. It's great.

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

Yeah get that B***h!!!! Good Job Fight for what is yours. Great poem b the way

[kyrie]

No matter what the purpose, it's raw and uninhibited. Well done! The indignant anger that burns inside us at the injustice we face.... That is sometimes the best sort of anger there is, I believe. It reminds us that we might not be perfect, but we damn well deserve more than the agony and darkness we're shoved into. Great job, I love it.

[Cynthia]

Its fine that it isn't polite, you can express the emotion beter! The anger is really here and the readers can feel it. i love the ending of it :)

[hannajade]

i think it is very poetic, I really love how you have,
'beautiful lies
yet so f*****g fake'
You're a really good poet!

[M.Babu]

Writing is the best place to release all that pent up emotion. If you go through my poem KARMA EXPEDITED you'll notice it's dark and sinister and that was me putting down all the hate and accumulated rage and disdain i'd couped up for ages. But i tried to add some characters and a half storyline to make it readable. I think you have the talent to creatively weave more into your poems. I think that if you put your mind to it you can come up with a great way to entertain and still vent. Writing is all about the expression so feel free to improvise. Otherwise your words are strong but tweaking is necessary. Good one keep writing:)

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

This is a good way to let out anger. Brilliant piece~