Those Dark Walls

Dark walls

All black

No windows

No light.

 

All hope is gone

You’re about to leave

Leave me forever.

 

The dark depressing walls

Pushes me down

I thought I was getting better

Hell no it just got f*****g worse.

 

I f*****g hate this.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Oppinion.

Reviews

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

This is a wonderful write. you always do a wonderful job at self expression. You are a remarkable person! Anyone who would leave you, doesn't deserve you. You are amazing special, and a caring person.... The fact that you are saddened from all the drama you face with the friends proove it. Great Job and cheer up Fallen. One day people will Fight to get to know you and care about you!

[Apathy To Empathy]

FOR THE LOVE OF GOD I THINK WE'RE THE SAME PERSON!!
I feel this way waaaaayyy too~ much! I feel this sense of being trapped when I read this and I know you can't be alone...But thank you for the relation, and thank you for posting.

[Jim Parson]

I can't entirely agree with some of the others regarding your last line being out of sync with the rest of the poem. No, it doesn't flow or fit smoothly with the rest, but it's that punch in the gut, slap in the face style with which you write all of your poetry. It worked for me.

[Arabdha]

this poem brings me back the memories of all the times i felt depressed..good writing !

[M.Babu]

it pretty much summarises on that period in someone's life. It had that potential to get dreadfully dark as so many poems in the site but you kept it simple and thus unique. I liked that- good poem; concise and descriptive

[Cynthia]

I like this as well, I think the last line is sort of.. doesn't match of what you have written before, maybe you can re order it, and it'll be much better. I hope this helps, cause its really interesting! I don't mean rude either, thats just what I think.
Good Job!

[Chelsea]

Nice, it reminds me of our collaboration! But a shorter version.
I know this feeling. My life right now is so out of my control and I'm just so depressed :(
Great write, you are a pro at depressing poems!

[FallenHeroXx]

Good Poetry...

Fallen

[Just Charles]

The end seems a bit misplaced.

[hannajade]

I love it! -- but the last line seems a little out of place, but that could be a good thing too for it gives it a very abrupt ending.