Crawling.

A Poem by A Risen Heroine.

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So many times I've been crawling

crawling on the f*****g ground

the f*****g dirty ground

is enough for me to see

see I've done enough.

You pushed me down

left me dying

left me in this f*****g deep sorrow

yes you smashed my head against the cold dirty ground

hell I hate how you did it

now you tells me to grow up

to be the mature one

hell I am mature

hell I did grow up

Speak for yourself you god forsaken w***e.

I promised to set you free

yet you tells me to imagine

a place for us

hell I wont

I wont breath on your god damn lies

Yes the creatures of the dark

lies beneath your bed

waiting for my single command

waiting for my command to kill you

once for all.

© 2011 A Risen Heroine.

Author's Note

Ignore grammar problems please.
Honest Oppinion.

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Chelsea

This is so sad :( But I like how you rise above! threating to release the creatures beneath the bed (loved that part).
I think the swear words worked really well. It emphasized your feelings, so good call on that!
You write well, and I love your depressing/angry style! Very unique and captivating :)

Posted 13 Years Ago

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Steph's_romantic_myster..

The sadness the anger, the regret, all prominant emotions in this poem. You drive to express yourself through vearse comes through very accurately and clearly and it drives on who reads, to feel it with you... The expressions you use, brings out the anger, more prominately and the ability to emplore a poem with let just say colorful metaphores ie. F*****g, and so forth, is uncanny. You actually took the feeling you were trying to express and enhanced it by using a very natural talent. I surmise you are an excellent writer and your excellent work so far, has shown it! another Terrific read.