My wish.

I wish I could stop your tears from falling down

Apparently I make it even worse

save me I know I’ll drown

Lead me out of this curse

Just because I’ve stopped trying doesn’t mean I don’t care

I’m so sorry for everything

You told me I don’t dare

Say Sorry for everything I’ve done

Maybe you and I could need a change

I wish you would take me back

I wish you could understand how much you mean to me

Everything is turning black

I wish so much I can’t get

Author's Note

Ignore grammar problems please.
Honest Oppinion.

Reviews

[Chelsea]

Really like it. I like how you step up and admit your wrongs. A part of this persons pain. Most people just blame it on others!
Apparently I makes it even worse- Apparently I make it even worse. (You don't need the s in there)
Maybe try adding some more descriptive words. A bit more imagery?
You write really well :) Great flow, emotion, etc.
:)

[Theodore]

i can relate to this im just wondering whats making you or who making you feel this much pain. but at least you letting it out great work...

[An owl on the moon]

Such a heartfelt, painful plea filled with the angst of darker days... like the winter of the soul longing again for spring. Honest and vivid...

[felica mariiee]

amazing

[Nobody.]

I felt the regret screaming through your words. Very well written. Quite powerful.
Cheers!
R.G.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought this was really nice and it was heartfelt. I think the piece was wonderful and I could relate to it. Good job on this. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Jim Parson]

Really quite nice and heart-felt. I had a little trouble following your rhyme scheme, but it didn't really take away from the emotion of your piece.

[HighBrowCulture]

love boat smashes against the daily grind, pointless now to list our mutual hurts and sorrows, let the tide etherize and swallow the echo of i do.

[FallenHeroXx]

This is actually quite good.
i like the word use
"Save me i know i'll drown"
Loved that line
All in all great read :)

Fallen