I Am Falling.

Just read it please :D

I am falling
I am falling
Please carry me home
Yes carry me home.

 

 

I need you now
How am I supposed
To tell you so?
Please carry me home
Yes carry me home.

 

 

Like a snowflake in the sun
I am melting
As you feel alive
I feel dead.
Your happiness makes me feel good
Though I’m still dead inside

 

 

I feel hollow
I feel sorrow
I feel everything
Everything’s crashing down
Down just around my ears

 

 

The darkness is my new kingdom
Yes it’s my new kingdom
I just wish I could let go of it
I don’t want that sort of kingdom

I’ll keep on fighting
Fighting against the darkness
Yes I’ll keep on fighting

 

 

You’re my angel in the dark
Carry me home
Yes carry me home

 

You’re my sunshine
My sunshine in the rain.

My sun in a cloudy sky
The light in the dark
You’re the happiness
In those hard times

 

 

I am falling
I am falling
Please carry me home
Yes carry me home

 

 

The sky is falling down on me
You’ll be there to keep it up
You wont let it break me
I wont let it break you
Your arms is my castle
Your heart is my everything
Every heartbeat makes me
Want to live
Every heartbeat of mine
Makes you want to live

I am falling
I am falling
Please carry me home
Yes carry me home.

Author's Note

Honest Oppinion please.
This is how I feel for real, no kidding.

Reviews

[Geralyn Miller]

I understand that you are hurting, an unfortunate by product of growing up. (It gets much better, wonderful, i9n fact.) That said, you have written a sad, subtle, almost wistful poem that many will relate to. The only critique is the overuse of repetition of phrases, it weakens the impact of your brilliant words.

[Twilight]

Sad and sincere, but also quite interesting to read. The wording is pretty good, and this piece provides an insight into the writer's state of mind. She is sharing and expressing her emotional trauma, through the flow of her words! Thankyou, for sharing this with us - and keep writing!

[EarthExile]

This almost seems to be written like a song, with the repeating chorus.

I definitely feel the teenage-girl-angst in this poem. You spend half your time praising this person as a source of light and happiness and safety, but you're still miserable anyway. Which, to me, is fairly evocative of how young girls feel a lot of the time.

Makes me think of my little sister.

Keep on expressing yourself and honing your craft. You have talent, and you have something to say, but you need to figure out who you're writing *to*. Not who is the subject of your poetry, but who is your audience? How do you relate to them?

Keep it up.

[felica mariiee]

Honestly this is amazing, ground breaking n breath taking this is simply beautiful.
If you actually feel this pain my sympathy is towards your well being.

[Theodore]

I hope you don't feel like this for real very depressing but also good keep up the good writing

[FallenHeroXx]

This was really great.
I love the stanza "I am falling. I am falling. Please carry me home. Yes carry me home."
This was one of the better ones you've written.

Fallen