I Am Falling.

Just read it please :D

I am falling
I am falling
Please carry me home
Yes carry me home.

 

 

I need you now
How am I supposed
To tell you so?
Please carry me home
Yes carry me home.

 

 

Like a snowflake in the sun
I am melting
As you feel alive
I feel dead.
Your happiness makes me feel good
Though I’m still dead inside

 

 

I feel hollow
I feel sorrow
I feel everything
Everything’s crashing down
Down just around my ears

 

 

The darkness is my new kingdom
Yes it’s my new kingdom
I just wish I could let go of it
I don’t want that sort of kingdom

I’ll keep on fighting
Fighting against the darkness
Yes I’ll keep on fighting

 

 

You’re my angel in the dark
Carry me home
Yes carry me home

 

You’re my sunshine
My sunshine in the rain.

My sun in a cloudy sky
The light in the dark
You’re the happiness
In those hard times

 

 

I am falling
I am falling
Please carry me home
Yes carry me home

 

 

The sky is falling down on me
You’ll be there to keep it up
You wont let it break me
I wont let it break you
Your arms is my castle
Your heart is my everything
Every heartbeat makes me
Want to live
Every heartbeat of mine
Makes you want to live

I am falling
I am falling
Please carry me home
Yes carry me home.

Author's Note

Honest Oppinion please.
This is how I feel for real, no kidding.

Reviews

[Geralyn Miller]

I understand that you are hurting, an unfortunate by product of growing up. (It gets much better, wonderful, i9n fact.) That said, you have written a sad, subtle, almost wistful poem that many will relate to. The only critique is the overuse of repetition of phrases, it weakens the impact of your brilliant words.

[Candy-pooh]

It's not the best song that I've heard from someone but it's pretty good

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

My honest oppinion is, you need'nt feel this way. You need to remember that you are a good person and screw what other people think. I too have dwelt in the darkest shadows, wishing people would just leave me alone, and let me dwell in the serenity of my darkest deepest desires. I disagree with miller's statement, its not a product of growing up... Its a product of life, Just don't shut your self out to all the good things as well. yeah they come and go, yeah when they go it often times hurts, but its those experiences that make us stronger and make us want to fight even more harder.... Or, they can destroy you. Life is a tornado, strong and unpredictable. It often causes disaster, but still must take its course... This is an enjoyable piece, because we get to know you for you. You are an angel!!!! remember that!

[Cynthia]

Amazing! And in fact, thats what I feel now, I know how your are being hurt and the pain...... Yes, I am not goign to lie, but really, thats amazing! However, I dont think the repetition is a problem, thats make it stronger when I read it out loud, it sort of add the emotions more inside, and oh, thats so moving!Thats sad, and I am sure lots of people can relate to this! Great Job!

[ColorblindMartian.]

I felt like i was reading lyrics to a song, there's a profound sadness to this, while still keeping you reading by its hinting optimism.

[Alicia™]

Aww, this is so sad and yet beautiful!

[Janna]

I love the repition but it makes it sound a bit like a song. It reminds me of Yilma Tafere Tasews 'If I could poem' although he only repeats one line. Its a really well written poem - well done!

[Dilan Gray]

I really love your poem, it is very well written and I love the images.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This is written very well! It would go excellent as a song, Sadness can take over a persons life if given into it, look to what makes you happy and grasp onto that and hold on!

[QC]

Sad. Even though it's listed as a poem, it played like a song in my mind. It gets a lot happier toward the end. I like it. Great read!

[Roxi L]

It was sad and it was a great read. I loved the pure emotion that is coming through the poem.
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