The Red Liquid.

I saw the blood running down my arm

The red liquid seems so clean

So tasty and delicious

It makes me wanna taste

Makes me wanna cut

Makes me wanna regret...

 

All I have in my mind is you

So cold

So cold

You don’t give a s**t about me

So cold

So cold

 

The red liquid finds its way

Down to my hand

To my fingers

My tongue slides on my finger

Tastes the fresh and clean blood

Makes me hunger for more

Makes me wanna cut

Makes me wanna regret

 

All I have in my mind is you

So cold
So cold

You don’t even care if I was dead

You would be dancing on my grave

So cold

So cold

 

Those scars are caused by you

You’re on my mind

I’ve lost you

As I see the red delicious blood

Running down my arm

My fingers are covered in red

My mouth as well

The blood invites me in

Makes me long for more

Makes me wanna cut

Makes me wanna regret everything...

Author's Note

Honest Oppinion please.

Reviews

[GamingGal]

Pros: I've been there, done that, bought a t-shirt, and everything else. Cutting is something hard to deal with, but something we deal with nonetheless. It makes me sad to know other people deal with it, but ah well. This poem is quite well written. Your imagery lets me see this blood running down pale skin and dripping from fingertips, even see it smeared on the mouth. And the repetition of that one stanza is a nice touch.

Cons: None.

Overall: You did a good job with this poem. You conveyed the emotions as well as the topic itself. Good job.

[Chelsea]

Those scars is caused by you- Those scars are caused by you
Just a mistake!!
Really excellent poem. You captured the feeling so strongly! Of the urge to cut, regret, etc. You speak honestly in your poems :)

[Nothing Personal]

A dark poem. And could be a song lyrics for a death metal number. Honestly..It's good..The blood lust is real and satanic..It's a great goth write..My compliments :-)

[FallenHeroXx]

This is really good.
The Message on the other hand.
Sort of distorted.
I love the message though.
but don't cut yourself.
Don't ever cut yourself

Fallen