Saw You Today

I saw you today

I saw you, 

Walking down the street

As I caught your eye

As I smiled at you

You brushed me off

My heart broke

Turned to stone

It felt like 

My heart broke,

Into a thousand tiny pieces.

Who is to pick 'em up? 

No one

The one to pick 'em up,

Left me bleeding.

Author's Note

Ignore any grammar issues.
Honest Opinion.

Reviews

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

I like it. You describe very well the love sight and break up. Thanks for sharing.

[Ama May Cooper]

I wasn't to keen on this im sorry to say, i feel it lacked something to reel me in and leave me panting i didn't feel much emotion from the piece , although on the other hand i see what your aiming for and i like the simplicity and i feel yoru repetetion had the desired effect.
I feel the problem with this piece stems from you cutting it short in a way, it feels like it had alot of possible run but it was left in the lurch.
A nice read at any cost. sweet and honest.

[Coyote Poetry]

Good to read your poetry again. I missed you. I enjoyed the poem. Hard when we see someone who was important and we became not so important. I like the thoughts and the emotion in the poetry. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[stars are far]

That was very great work, you did an impressive work here..
well done

[Dayran]

It seems clear that he won't be going your way. Nice ...