Collateral Damage

Collateral Damage
Her heart was broken, so his future was stolen
from the irrational decision she had chosen
out not of logicality but fear and selfishness surpassed
so not to be reminded everyday of her painful past
to not feel tainted, to never become acquainted
with what their failed relationship had created
maybe if under different circumstance
he would have been given a fair chance
instead for their consequence he has to suffer
for the hatred that they now share for one another
for the fact that she doesn't care to be a mother
though one day soon she's bound to discover
she'd forsaken the one who would always love her
and from this loss she may never recover
so he is the one who pays, for the mistakes they made
another innocent life being taken away
and he pleas and begs through his unheard cries
unjustly brought to his immediate demise
death now bestowed upon a helpless child
angels weep, and the devil smiles

 

 

Angela Kiekover
© 2008  
All Rights Reserved

 

Reviews

[Joseph - Michael]

That was quite an unusual piece I've read in a while. It's like a bizzard twisted around from one simple mistake, then all hell break loose just like that. I even love the last line, it make the entire writing even more stronger and disturbing, yet it's much more worth reading...

So, it's all still great tho...

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Hmm... interesting... very intriguing as well. :D lol! I really like this. I feel some sort of connection to this piece. Probably because hearts are always broken on each try. :P LMAO! It's cool, though. I really enjoyed this piece. I felt for the girl. :)

BTW, the last line was freakishly awesome! It was quite unusual to see the poem go from realistic to more "spiritual"/surreal. ;)

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Camroc]

i love it i can feel it it,s like you inspire me to write ....... maybe thats why your my sis

[Voltaire Mephisto (aka ..]

Heartwrenching. Usually I wouldn't be into this, but the mood I'm in has opened up a new dimension.

[A LaDy NaMeD D]

This is a very good poem, you're very articulate. It flowed nicely and it made me emotional, which I think is the point of your poem.

Danni J

[Dalaina Renee]

Wow, very emotional!

[Wicahpi]

This is a sad piece of writing, reflected very well in it's words.
Nicely written...I can relate to the situation at hand.
The message is conveyed in a unique way.
"Damn the Devil, anyway!"

[TP LaRose]

Very good.
At first I didn't realize what this was about. But once I did, I was choked up.
Angels weep and the devil smiles......very touching.

[Dawn]

this is a really good poem, i like it!
you used 'big' words and made them flow with a rythm that really accentuates the details of the poem.
Keep writing!