In Between Teeth

CONTENT WARNING: Short but a little gross. Some more weird content I randomly wrote. Been feeling pretty odd.

In Between Teeth
Alira Cohen

String dangling
Pink and long
Stuck in the gum
Bruised and tangled
A torn flag in the rocks
A human string
From slashed tendons
Trustworthy smiles
Don’t come back for me

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Marie]

Wow! A very interesting read, Alira. I don't see the imagery as been gross at all. You paint amazing pictures for your reader through your words! You say so much in so few words! I feel the string is a piece of cotton floss to clean between one's teeth and of course, it makes the gums pink, can get tangled and may slightly bruise the gums. I love the layout of the poem and how it is expressed. Amazing write! Thank you for sharing with me. I enjoyed reading very much...

[Alira]

Thank you for your kind comment! I’m glad that people are finding the imagery more interesting than gross. I’m happy you liked it!

[Marie]

Most welcome always, Alira. Wishing you a very lovely day to enjoy, dear friend...

[Alira]

Aw, thanks! I hope you have a nice day too.

[Marie]

Thank you so v-e-r-y much, Alira...

[Ashi written tale & poe..]

i like the rhythm of the poem.

[Alira]

Thank you!

[Aura]

This is an interesting piece, I didn't think it was gross. I got the idea you were talking about chewing gum inside your teeth!

These lines made me think of gum

"String dangling
Pink and long
Stuck in the gum" ..... gum is pink or can be pink, if you keep on chewing it, and if it is bubble gum I think it can stretch. And it can get stuck between teeth... maybe in your gums too!

Thanks for sharing Alira, a short but interesting read!

[_rabbitofhabit (1word)]

I think much of the poetic structure will go over my head. All I can say is it's interesting, especially due to the lines:

"A human string"
"Trustworthy smiles"
"Don’t come back for me"

It's actually quite amazing how such few words can cause a vivid scene to come into mind. I think it's incredible how you can jot down these few words and give each reader something unique to ponder. How it tells a story that must be pieced together.

I also am a fan of the line:
"A torn flag in the rocks"

I cannot lie. I am not much of a poetry-lover. However, this is one of my favorite pieces.

[Alira]

Hey, thanks!! I really appreciate it! It’s a great honor when someone who isn’t usually into poetry really likes a poem I wrote (I’m gonna be frank, I’m more into prose as well, but my most current prose pieces are incomplete at the moment…I find that poems are good for me to write because they keep me relatively on my game and help with writer’s block).