Again and Again

...Where do we go from here?

Again and again, my love, again

My carousel heart turns

You love me, you love me not

You love me more than anything

Or so I thought

 

Back and forth, darling, we sway

Like a autumn leaf

Before it falls to the ground

Slowly, without regret

Not a sound

 

Listen to the rain, it falls for us

Again and again, my love, again.

Author's Note

A simple poem. Tell me what you think. :-)

Reviews

[Victorious]

Dear Aianarie,

I find it hard to critique your poems because they come out pretty good. I'm not sure what was meant by the last line, "listen to the rain," but I love the rest of it. You have given a scenario and rolled it up into a unique metaphor. I like it and enjoyed reading this.

Thank you for sharing!

Sincerely Victorious

God bless you!

[Who Cares]

Your imagery was strong and this was a FANTASTRIC start, I love the way you add nature to your love cycle poem. I would love to read more, so where do you go? I would personally think you should Continue with this cycle use that repetition like you are on a love roller-coaster and it has it ups and downs, describe this cycle the emotions to come with it, or continue with the carousel reference except love is spinning out of control. Your words are beautiful as is but they would be a masterpiece if you add to this and elaborate. I love this now in my library. Nice write

[allie_arrowz]

beautiful, i loved it! reminds me of Dickinson a little :) the mix with nature is so pretty.

[Poetic Beauty]

Love can be a vicious cycle sometimes. Like you are stuck on a merry go round and can't get off. This thought is portrayed with great finesse a and the carousel part really hits home.

[The Scholar]

Ah, I love the description of your "carousel heart" turning. Each stanza adds more beauty to this enchanting poem. And it is indeed enchanting. you've caught me up in it, and have me reading it again and again.
Wonderful portrayal.

[MandaBear]

I like it:P Very simple and complex. very cool Great Job

[Illuminare]

Oh, I must agree with everything Jess said. It's funny how the "simplest" of poems are actually the most complex...this poem arouses many thoughts and questions.

Brilliant poetry as usual, m'dear.

[V.J.C.]

Very beautiful, thank you for the read.

[ravenjess]

I really really love this. Yeah its simple but so pretty. it gave me shivers! anyway i think its perfect.

"Back and forth, darling, we sway
Like a autumn leaf
Before it falls to the ground
Slowly, without regret
Not a sound"

LOVE. just love