Again and Again

...Where do we go from here?

Again and again, my love, again

My carousel heart turns

You love me, you love me not

You love me more than anything

Or so I thought

 

Back and forth, darling, we sway

Like a autumn leaf

Before it falls to the ground

Slowly, without regret

Not a sound

 

Listen to the rain, it falls for us

Again and again, my love, again.

Author's Note

A simple poem. Tell me what you think. :-)

Reviews

[Victorious]

Dear Aianarie,

I find it hard to critique your poems because they come out pretty good. I'm not sure what was meant by the last line, "listen to the rain," but I love the rest of it. You have given a scenario and rolled it up into a unique metaphor. I like it and enjoyed reading this.

Thank you for sharing!

Sincerely Victorious

God bless you!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

WOW! This was beautiful in so many ways! Excellent!

B e a u t i f u l, as you capture it perfect... love is unrecheble sometimes, as it is so strong, it hurts... simplicity in pure art. I love it.

E.L.

[Emrys Realmskip]

This is short and sweet, i loved reading this!

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Full of pathos, that's a great poem ! The couple-up/breaking-up sequence is realistic and well described :)

[Remember Courage]

This was a really pretty poem. The connection with nature and a man made ride such as a carousel was interesting. You consistently use the same beginnings and words which make the poem have a great flow. Your very talented at what you do and this was the first poem I read from you. I look forward to reading more after this intriguing piece.
-Courage

[pixieheart97]

I love your use of nature throughout this poem and the metaphors you used were amazing.

[Annie]

Love the repetition of the 'again.' I also like the analogy of a 'carousel heart.' Awesome! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful flow of words in the poem. I had to read again for the pleasure of the words and the positive thoughts. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Dark Poetry]

A very gentle poem, I love it.