Disappearance

Where art thou, my fallen soldier?

My heart beats fast within my chest

As I look out, over this battered battle field

The air smells of death and the toils of war

Oh where, oh where, art thou?

Heaven help me, I am losing my breaths

They come out forced and shallow

Vision foggy and blackened around the edges

Where are you?--oh God, save your soul!

But nay--you can't have expired--so soon, at least

You are too strong of both spirit and body

No, not even evil's wrath could have defeated you...

...Then where are you?...

...My one and only love?

 

Author's Note

A free-verse sequel (of sorts) to 'Hail'. I expect to write an iambic pentameter version of this at some point. For now, it's quite rough. I hope you enjoy it. If you have any ideas for the sonnet version, feel free to share. :-)

Reviews

[Yellow Butterfly]

You're words allow the reader to feel the atrocities and heart ache that war can bring. The feeling of not knowing if a loved one is alive or dead. Roaming the fields of devastation hoping and praying for his safetys as he lays dying on the battlefield.

I like the way you have penned this wonderful poem, and I'm sure your version of a sonnet will be just fine.

Great work!

[Annie]

Aww! This poem totally conveys the sense of sadness and longing that this person feels looking out over the battefield. There is a sense of disbelief, but still an essence of hope. Great poem, well done. :)

[MetBySunlight]

The emotion this write gave me was quite powerful. The words are beautifully chosen and beautifully written. Well done!

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice flow of words and a sad story in the poem. I like the description and the desire in the poem. To lose someone in life or war can leave a open door for sadness forever. Thank you for the outstanding poem.

[Roe]

I love the emtion in this and the picture it painted in my mind.......nice write