Fiery Love

The pain burns inside,

as you put me out like the burning of a midnight cigarette.

Fr you don't want me any more, no you don't want me any more.

So I left you one your porch without a goodnight kiss.

Now my whole world's going insane, going amiss.

So why doesn't anything matter anymore?

I'm going thought depression, going thought aggression.

For I feel like a volcano the anger that burns inside me

As inside I feel as if legion upon legion of fire ants are eating me alive.

For you have broken my heart.

Won't even look at me, since we've been apart. So I call and call but you never pick up the phone.

So I sit and cry, as these hot tears run down my cheaks.hey

I just can't stand the passion that burns inside me.

So I'll make like a Vietnam war Buddhist Priest, but I don't need any fuel.

For this heated conflict is fuel enough for hell..

For I'm burning on the inside, why not the outside too?

So tell me, can you put this midnight cigarette out too?

Reviews

[northern monkey]

Great job AG. This is my favourite of yours....so far. High emotion well-expressed.

[Ashley]

the emotion and frustration in this poem is excellently expressed, though i would run through for some grammatical errors and spelling mistakes that are left in the poem.

[Hayley]

"For I'm burning on the inside, why not the outside too?
So tell me, can you put this midnight cigarette out too?"
This poem is really amazing. All the rhymes work really well and aren't forced. I don't really know what else to say other than I really liked it.

[Pollyanna]

The pain and emotion are extremely raw and coming through wonderfully. I feel this would work better as lyrics.

Always reread to check spelling and grammer.

[*[[ Cadence ]]*]

this is really good...nice job! (:

[Sukriti Suki]

Moving away with still love inside is just the most painful thing.I can relate so well and I just absolutely love how you penned this.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Wonderful write........I am sending you a personal message on this one :)