Won't you stay young

This one goes out to my little cousin, I love him so very much.

Couldn't you stay young, just how your are?

You seem so happy and confident as if you could truly reach the stars.

They say ignorants is bliss, but rather young age is.

For you don't hear all the mean things people say.

So don't grow up and see the world's evil ways.

For your my favorite little cousin, and you know I love you.

Your constant happiness gives me hope.

For I know your my little man

Yes, I wish you'd stay little but I know that's not God's plan.

So let's have fun when your young.

Let's wrestle and run and play football and basketball.

Let's read books, tell jokes and just talk.

Let me hold you hand when we go on walks.

Let's us go to the movies and go get ice cream for you know I'll pay.

As long as you talk to me, for I love to hear the funny things you say.

So do me this one favor and please stay young.

So today let me tickle you so I can hear you joyous laugh.

So I can see you smile,

For I know your only be young for a while.

So tell me you love me and give me a big hug.

Hold me close and hold me snug.

For one day you won't want to hold me hand but rather shake it.

So I'll let you grow up, for I know you must.

But promise me this, that your always be my little man.

For I know this, that for you God has big plans

Author's Note

I have been noticing that most of my reviews have been saying that I am "forcing rhymes" as in I'm "rhyme happy" I'v been working on not that so much. Let's see how that all works out! Thanks for all the reviews! God Bless!

Reviews

[Zoe Jay]

I like the rhythm and flow of this. You use the sounds of the language well, this poem has a rolling feel. You used rhyme well here. The rhyme scheme is not intrusive, the slight irregularity gives it charm and dynamic, and the rhymes are subtle and also centered on soft sounds, which gives a warm and pleasing feel. Nice sentiments and nice writing. It has a sweetness which is very charming, but with wistful, sad overtones, recognizing how youthful innocence and vigor will alway ultimately fall prey to tiredness, cynicism, and defeat. Well done!

[Ashley]

i think that anybody that has ever loved a child has felt this way at some point. easy to relate to the ideas expressed here.

[qaralynn]

beautiful!!! I love it

[Coyote Poetry]

Kids can see fun and good in a day. Too bad we must get old. My Grandson said "Wow" to anything new and any fun place he goes to. He make me feel good and alive. I like your poem. To appreciate your cousin mean you have eyes that can see the good that is around you. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[*[[ Cadence ]]*]

excellent (:

[Pollyanna]

The flow and general cadence is fabulous plus, you've done a wonderful job conveying love and concern for your cousin. Very genuine feeling!

You already know I'm going to mention spelling, grammar usage and utilizing proper tense so . . .

[Skoo.]

I really like this, the poem shines despite a couple of spelling mistakes (probably just typos) here and there... Your cousin is very lucky to have you looking out for him (:

[Sukriti Suki]

Great..You know what is about to come and so you relish the present even more..I really like how you let the words flow..nice write.

[Little Abbey]

Very nice, though it is agreed that you might want to fix the minor spelling issues, and then it will be amazin! Nice job!

[northern monkey]

Well worth reading for the powerful feelings and emotions expressed in this. Struggled a bit with the rhythm, but still good compelling writng.Keep it coming....