Goodnight Valentine

Murder son

she's painful

or else you'll lose forever

I remember those silent tears

that i once cried myself

they woke me, woke me up

to all your lies

trembling so hard

i shook myself awake

and now they fall again

I guess I'm lost for tonight

My shiny toy gun is broken

so just take the words I say

and force them to hide

forever in my tears

so you can laugh at what my lips won't murmer

 

Goodnight Valentine

But before I go

I've got one thing to say

crawl back in your own head

cause i own mine

you don't control me

   you don't

        you don't

you don't contol me

 

I was prentending, don't cry out

Be quiet now

I'll shoot you with my shiny toy gun

Don't cry out

Cease fire, Cease fire

It's not a war, just hide-and-seek

I'll count, you hide

I'm ready to play

play with your heart

like you did mine

 

I'm gunna take whatever is easy

the easy way out

so, i step noisely closer, closer

right to where your hidden

your heart accelerates

fear grips you, fear

nothing you see now is clear

you cry because you hold the truth inside

but your tears already said

what your lips won't murmer

Reviews

[compositionc]

OMG. SOMEONE COULD SING THIS!

[Emily Rae]

interesting poem

[ImagineItAll]

This definitely reads like it could be made into a song. Interesting choice of words :-)

[joshua deathdealer]

'It's not a war, just hide-and-seek' Beautiful.

[StarSandwich]

Loved it! :D hehehe. Could make it into a song!

[Helpless]

Goodnight Valentine

But before I go

I've got one thing to say

crawl back in your own head

cause i own mine

you don't control me

you don't

you don't

you don't contol me


this sounds like it could be part of a song! nice!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Reminds me of a speed metal or punk rock song.

[Rene Velez]

gripping, heart churning words with great imagery...