Chapter One

My first chapter

Chapter One

Nazi Germany 1945

He lit the cigar that was between his cold lips. The smoke filled the car but he didn’t bother to open a window, even though he heard his partner coughing.

“Do you mind?” his partner asked.

“What you can’t handle a little smoke?” he said. “Here have a cigar, maybe smoking with me might take you mind off of things?”

          The two gentlemen were Nazi officers Karl Hermann Frank and Hermann Wilhelm Göring. They were in a car driving toward a pub at midnight.

          “You know I think I’ll have that cigar right about now,” Göring said. “I don’t understand how we can trust some American detective. What is he going to do?”

          “He’s American. If Hitler was still alive he’d probably put him on the SS,” Frank said.

          “Yeah but what if he’s got nothing. What if he’s just wasting our time?”

          Hermann Frank lifted his coat.

          “Then we shoot him.”

The car stopped in the middle of the street.

"What happened?" Frank asked the driver.

"I don't know," the driver replied.

"Well then find out," Göring grunted.

The driver got out of the car to check. The driver hopelessly was pulling things out to get the car running.  

"This is ridiculous, what are we supposed to do, wait here the whole night," Göring complained.

"Don't worry, the bar is close by, we can probably walk there."

The two men got out of the car and headed for the destination by foot. Unfortunately it was raining. And it was freezing in the midnight.

 After a couple of minutes they finally got the pub. The place was fairly empty, except for the couple of people there that was singing. They sat down at a table in the middle of the bar. They ordered their drinks and waited.

"Sorry to keep you gentleman waiting," a voice said from behind them. It was a young handsome American. He sat down across from them at the table.

“Where’s you manners?” Göring said.

“Excuse me?”

“Well usually people introduce themselves.”

The man smiled. “You don’t need to know my name right now.”

"So let's just get down to business" the American said. "Do you people have my money?"

"Yes, but first we want to know why you dragged us all the way over here," Frank said.

"Well I have very important information to tell you people."

“Oh really? Is it so important that we had to arrange this meeting at midnight?” Göring said.

“I assure you this isn’t something we can talk about over a cup of coffee. I work for a special group that is involved with this war of yours.”

The two officers hesitated.

“Look we'll give you the money. We have nothing to lose. After all we do have five of our guards hiding in this bar. So if you dare do anything foolish, we will kill you."

"I see." the man grinned. "You people take precautions in everything you do don’t you?"

"Well how can we trust your kind? We are in war with your people," Frank said.

"It's true you're in war with my people. But I'm not really American."

They looked confused.  

"I'm not really human. I’m what you kind call a shadow. We have roamed this earth as long as you humans have. Well we are like you humans, except we can do much more."

"A shadow eh? I knew we are dealing with a maniac," Göring said.

"Now just hold on a minute. I have another thing to say."

“Oh really, well please amuse us with you stories” Göring laughed. He signaled one of the guards.

The man grinned, his plan was working. He leaned in.

"I killed Hitler."

They both laughed.

“I’m not sure you noticed but Hitler committed suicide,” Frank said.

“Well that’s what you humans think. But really I am the one who killed him.”

“You expect us to believe that?”

“Why not, it’s true.”

“Then how exactly did you kill him?” Frank asked.

There was a devilish smile on the Americans face.

“Nightmares.”

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Eli]

Wow, very interesting chapter. I really want to read more, not only because of your good writing but because I'm a huge WWII fan and anything about historical fiction/nonfiction. I do want to point out that in the beginning, you should introduce the characters and their names sooner. It was confusing for me to see their names so much later. Also the part when they meet the American is a little confusing. I would just have the car not break down, and just fill in the emotion of the moment when they go in the bar or when the American finally arrives. But other than that I thought it was well written ;)

[snopadelic]

very very good. Nazi are ineresting and i like the pull very good read.

[A.R. Lynch]

Great first chapter! I really enjoy the setting and the whole Nazi Germany aspect. Although I do agree with Eli. The part with the car breaking down is kind of unnecessary and confusing. I'd just stick with a little more character development or something like that.

[zappy]

wow great chapter you should keep goin on this its great.