Coming Back From The Dead

Pretty how much I feel write now.(get it write? Cause it's a writing website? Ah forget it...)

I wake up.
Another day in Hell.
That terrible feeling of Fear bubbles up.
I want to fight it but I can't.
The fear of doing something wrong burns in my mind.
I feel like there's a noose around me.Pulling tighter when I do it wrong.
I close my eyes I feel like I'm fading back into the Darkness.
When it hits me.
Memories.
Laughter.
Smiles.
Fun.
The Summer.
I open my eyes and I Feel A Rush,Like I've Done Cocaine
The bonds that hold me down Break
I feel like my strengths come back better than ever.
The noose tightens but I break it.
I get up and start walking
What seems like a long tunnel.
I'm walking back home.
Time to come back and tell the world Nicks Back

Author's Note

What do u think?

Reviews

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Normally I wouldn't go for the short and choppy feelings but it really adds to the effect of your emotion, where everything begins and everything ends. Period. I like that style of this.
"I feel like there's a noose around me. Pulling tighter when I do wrong." Your ideas are amazing and you do a great job portraying them, but I can see that you lack the exact thought process of how to get it into poetry. That will come with time I'm sure, because you definitely have all of the ingredients to be a good poet.

[Pikachu]

This is a great write. The shorter verses express so much emotion by just one word. Lovely, just lovely. c:

[Luciole]

Wow, this was awesome. Really powerful, I dig it. There's a really strong sense of emotion in this, which is what really sets it off. Nice work.

[13ReasonsWhy]

I...I just. I'm speechless. +1 into my favourites. You've portrayed everyday of my life...and so many others...so easily. I just love it. Thank you for writing this.

[Roxi L]

OMG this is sooo kick a*s!!! Loved it

Writing keeps the dream alive
~V~

[Grace Catherine C.]

I like this, it's kick-a*s.

[Silent Knight]

Very interesting. I like the dark feeling of it at first, that mid-way turns into a positive, "like-a-boss" attitude. Good write.

[Nicole Cruz]

It's good. I can sense emotion coming from it.
However it doesnt really flow well, not a bad thing, just the structure of the poem could be improved. Like some lines are shorter than others and they dont really create a flow. Try balancing them out c:
Good Job!

[Anonymous Me]

i like it :)

[luna11]

I think this is a really good poem :D
I have a bit of advice but you can ignore it if you like because it's not really that important.
Because some of the lines are long and some are short, if I were you I would split the longer lines into a few shorter lines.
e.g: The line 'I feel like there's a noose around me.Pulling tighter when I do it wrong.' could be 2 lines (the second sentence on a new line).
But that's probably not important. It's just something I realised while I was reading and I thought I might mention it.