[Living -- an evening of light into]

b''h 

28 Oct 2013

[Living -- an evening of light into]

Living -- an evening of light into

Dark -- is the timeless time between

One here and another.  We travel

This wilderness -- alone -- although

We think we have neighbors on the road.

The delusion is a defensive

Thing.  We fear the walking when we can

Only hear our own footsteps cracking

Dead branches and dry leaves.  Comfort

Comes -- but in pretense.  We continue. 

Firestone Feinberg

Reviews

[Great Aunt Astri]

A poem to 'make you think'. I think you have been very clever the way you start sentences half way through a line and carry the meaning over to the next. It is like ' the timeless time between one here and another.' Enjoyed this poem very much.

[Firestone Feinberg]

Dear GAA, The technique is called 'enjambment', and it's an old established way of varying the metered flow of poems. Give it a try. It's not difficult and gives a surprise to the listener who generally expects to hear an even rhythm. Thanks for your warm and perceptive review. David