If you want to say something

b"h

25 Aug 2013

If you want to say something

And you say it in the morning --

The sun will listen to every word --

Your prayer will not go unheard --

And if you ask -- in the afternoon --

Then your question will rise to the sky

And your answer will fly down soon --

Down to where your searching eye

Can find it -- until evening be

Upon the land -- and pure silence reigns --

And no noise remains --

So you may -- at last -- speak freely.

 

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i love the wording in this, David---

yet it begged the question...what if it is a cloudy day? may we still speak freely...or will chains on our thoughts fall from the sky with the rain?

just thoughts...i love poems that push me to react like i did to this one.

[Firestone Feinberg]

And I love responses like yours which not only bring a smile to my face but make me think -- something I rarely do. Dear Jacob, I don't have the faintest idea if we might speak freely on a sunless day: this is a flawed poem! No doubt I won't receive my usual royalty check this month from WC. Oh well. Whaddya gonna do... Thanks for your fantastic review! ...David

[bobc]

D...another keeper. I like the last line...a good one. Thanx...bobc

[Firestone Feinberg]

Thanks so much Bob. Your opinion means a lot to me. Peace, David